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by cward210/30/05

Good Effort

Quite an enjoyable poem. You paint some good pictures here esp the lines 'Scented paper with calligraphy
Branded black like souls that burn' which is my fav. Both the rhyme and rhythmn are excellent and flow nicely.
The only thing that I would change would be in the end where you talk about 'his catch'. I think something else would sound better.
Good effort!

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