miss the stories of papatoad.your stories are the best.
by
Anonymous04/03/06
great story
your story was touching and realistic. I was deeply touched by the characters and their development through their difficult times. Though not to that extent, I can definitely relate to this story to some degree. All the while I am beginning to learn about myself as well through your story. Beautiful.
by
Anonymous04/16/06
The Best
I never expected to read a story of this calaber on Lit. This story is definaly worth main stream publication. This is the best story here!
I was reminded about your story by a comment left today in Feedback and I had to read it once more. It is the finest example on this site of how a therapist works with patients to get them to delve into their own actions by first getting them into their thought process, what was in their mind at certain points and from their go back and pickup days and times that can lead to a start of perception. The benchmarks this stories therapist and patients had to deal with are a credit to your writing and imagination. This story fits into my understanding of people, fantasy or not. It has little to do with reconciliation versus divorce, as each person has their own emotional psyche to live with, what is acceptable to one will not work for another, and that fact is evident by comments left by people on this site and their makeup.
This is my favorite story of all listed on this site, and that’s says rather a lot as there are some truly exceptional fantasies and fictions here.
With the highest of regards
I thank you
Peggytwitty
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Anonymous05/28/06
damn
by far the best story i have read on lit..and i have have read a good deal of them
I am married and although none of this has happened to us, it made me think more closely about not only our sex lives but how we react to things everyday. I am so glad they got back together at the end and I thought it was a wonderful story!! Keep them coming!
it was so very realistic and quite touching. i had a similar situation, though it didnt work out as merrily. i will find someone i still believe. thank you for this piece of literature of taste.
WOW 108 comments! I guess that along let's you know you have written a very well received tale. Let my voice join the chrous.
I thought you handled Steve's feelings very well. It leaves food for thought as I deal with some of the petty things in my relationaships. Thanks
by
Anonymous07/14/06
Great
This is byfar the best and most realistic story I have read on this site. At first I thought I was never going to finish all 18 pages but I was glued to the screen. It was great,
by
Anonymous07/21/06
This website is shit.
This website is shit.
It does now allow me to rate 1000 on a scale of 5.
I stopped reading when the asshole that posted this story fed the two of them to a useless piece of shit counselor. What a waste of time. This broken marriage might have survived before the dumbass shrink was injected into the mix. You don't need a quack to tell you how fucked up you are. Only the happy trails idiots believe in this crap. So, they lived happily ever after. I'm just thrilled as I can be. Bullshit.
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Anonymous07/23/06
Book Mark it!!!!
There are good stories on this site. And there are some superb ones. There might be another one as excellent as this, but I doubt it.
This one is so good it should be used as the standard for all others to achieve.
Outstanding story. Great character developement, very plausable plot line.
But as most stories in LW seem to deal with cheating wives with their husband's consent, I kept looking for that to happen. I think this story might have been better placed in the Novels/Novellas category. But, that's just this idiot's opinion.
Jenny
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Anonymous07/29/06
The best story on Literotica!
Thank you for the best story I have read on this site. I read the whole thing at one sitting, I could not stop. A truly great job!
by
Anonymous08/03/06
Fantastic
Without a doubt this is the best story I have found on the entire site. Plausible character development, unexpected plot twists, and an author who clearly understands both the pain of betrayal and the joy of reconciliation and forgiveness. My kudos to Longhorn__07 for this excellent contribution.
by
Anonymous08/09/06
Yep, don't know how many times I've read this
but it's STILL among the best of the best,by a country mile
by
Anonymous08/27/06
excellent
everything they said and more well done thanks
by
Anonymous09/15/06
believable and educational
I thought the story was one of the best I've read thus far.
It was realistic and that it could actually happen anywhere.
I learnt a lot in terms of counselling and mediation techniques. One little critique, I guess, is the length the husband went to record his wife's misdemeanours. I thought that might have been far-fetched. Most of us would would divorce immediately, at the drop of a , er, pantie, not go to great explanations on the details of building up to the finale as it were.
by
Anonymous10/09/06
crock
I despise and hate this fucked up stoy not because he got back with the whore, but because of the old bitch and his employeer interfering; NO employer has the right to hold my job hostage to my personal life, NONE, unless it directly harms the company (drug, etc). This was pure worthless horeshit wih no redeeming qualties
Longest fucking WIMP story I've ever read. Big pussy with a big gun, and no balls. No wonder he couldn't keep his women.
by
Anonymous11/11/06
Great Story
Although lengthy, very well written. It is a good display of what can go on in the minds of other people. Quite plausable,even if others don't feel that they personally would reeact this was. It is good that Barb had her Grandmother as a support, as well as other very fortunate factors, or there would have been nothing to salvage.
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Anonymous01/24/07
Cant believe he let the bitch back in
A slut is a slut is a slut. A cheater is a cheater and it is their innate personality, they will always be a cheat. No excuses not mental transfers, they are who and what they are and will never change.
by
Anonymous02/12/07
Soap
Overlong sappy soapopera that I finally skimmed thru to find he had been totally hornswoggled the whole time. What a stupid cuck!
by
Anonymous03/01/07
Best yet
Best story I've read here so far and I've read a shitload of them.
by
Anonymous04/01/07
Bullshit
A piss-poor story of a dumbass wimp and worthless slut. I was smart enough not to waste my time reading each of the lousy pages.
by
Anonymous04/12/07
great
very believable and im sure the detractors didnt read all the story or they to could see the real life emotion in this ...i truly enjoyed it .. a very long read but worth it ..maybe we could all take some lessons from it ...thank you roadbird
by
Anonymous04/13/07
AT LONG LAST-A REAL 'LOVING WIFE' STORY!!
All believable, and a GREAT STORY!! THIS one took real talent to write. And the AUTHOR(as opposed to 'writer') is as talented as they come on this site. The only spelling inaccuracy was "Pouring over the documents". It should have been "P-O-R-I-N-G-", AND not "P-O-U-ring". But all that crap aside, this story was well thought-out, and very well-written. The characters were all well developed, and the manner in which they were all "brought along" was just superb! FIVE STARS for this one! And I'm a tough marker!
by
Anonymous05/09/07
Excelent characterdevelopment.
Is the author a psychiatrist or marital consultant hem/herself? The maincharacters are very well defined and their development is very believable. It's a long read, but this also creates room for a realistic description of how deep the wounds, inflicted by such an affair, can get and what it takes to heal them. The style of writing keeps you wondering what the next chapter will bring. Well done.
... HDK It took one day with some little breaks to read your story. I have to confess it's one of the best english stories I've ever read at Literotica
Nucleus
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Anonymous06/15/07
Just
another wimp(who used to be a man) selling his soul for a piece of sluts cunt.
Too long! To long to get to the point. Heart breaking! A good man is tricked and trolloped. What really happens is an intelligent man is cheated on by a self-centered, selfish woman and her grandmother decides that inspite of how loathsome the GD is, she should stay married. So she manipulates the situation with money and power and tricks them back together. She is as selfish as her grand daughter. He needs to be with someone who is not selfish and manipulative and whose family respects him enough not to try to trick or influence him into something he clearly should not. He needs a woman who will love him and care for him and not just love herself. She wanted him back because she was selfish, not because she loved him. She does not change at the end. She wants what she wants and basically has a scheming family to help her. The nature of her personality is founded on a swamp that sucks the life of all around her: she is quicksand and will do what she wants and there is no absolute evidence at the end that she won't. HE should have run as fast as he could and never looked back. No divorce! Run anyway. IN time he would have got it. Years of a personality warping as much as his wifes had, do not change over night or even over years. No therapy or counseling is that good. She is a liar. What took years to make, takes years to revert if at all. Run, fella, Run!
by
Anonymous11/05/07
Good story !!!!
Good story! She fought for her love. Accepted her sins and went through regrets. Well, she wasn't perfect. But the incidents made her to go to counseling and slay her demons. It matured her. She apparently had still been thinking like a high school girl.
And, he fought too. though he was forced on. But he did fight. And, one who fights is never a wimp.
Longhorn:
I’ve read and reread this story a number of times and find that it appeals to me more than most on this site. I love the way you bring flesh to your characters and take the time to deal realistically with weighty issues. I also loved the feeling of continuity that you bring to the story. There were no tricky ‘artistic’ flashbacks, false clues, or discordant plot tricks. This was just a great story with a beginning, middle and an end. Sure there were things that I didn’t like. Lydia manipulating the husband into the prolonged counseling session: The husband’s inherent willingness to settle for forgiving past wrongs. The wife’s’ immediate acceptance of her ex-husbands’ (in his mind) infidelity with her sister. His acceptance of her continual disrespect for him during their short marriage, in my opinion there weren’t all that many happy times in the marriage. The counselors’ overlooking of the ‘suicidal tendencies’ expressed early in the sessions.
All of the listed issues are my opinions, and as the author you are totally in the right to take the story as you wish. Great job, very entertaining, thought provoking and a wonderful short read. Yes to me, this is a short read. I don’t understand all of the complaining on this site about stories longer than a page in length being too long to read. One commenter admitted to taking five days to read this story. Incredible and really sad! It probably took me less an hour to read it, online with all the delays inherent with reading over a somewhat slow interface. Others complained that it wasn’t erotic enough, with only 4 sex scenes. Give me a break; this story would have been boring with much more sex, and not believable. There was too much pain and confusion evidenced by the main protagonists to make it a suck and fuck extravaganza. Lastly the complaints dealing with contents for this site; the name is ‘LITEROTICA’ not eroticalit. Writing is by the title, implied to be more important. What is important to me, is a good story, well written that has some connection to something of an erotic nature. I applaud your efforts, it must have taken you many hours to develop and craft this story. I really look forward to reading more of your submissions. I am truly grateful to you for sharing your skill and imagination with us.
Having experienced being cheated on and getting revenge, I could identify very strong with this story. It's heartbreaking, disgusting, and very beautiful. Betrayal, revenge, forgiveness, hope, and love. You cut right into the very heart of it. You are a very talented writer. Thank you.
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Anonymous02/19/08
Beautiful Written
wow! It took me 9 hours to finish reading your story. It's a beautiful story, though it is long. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. You really took the time to take out the characters, exploring their emotions, their sexualities & their issues. I like the character of Lydia. She is the one who save their marriage. She is a wonderful grandma. The ending is beautiful done that give you a smile when finished reading it. Perfect 10 for you. --- Thor
by
Anonymous03/17/08
A Masterpiece
Just read this and I think it's an absolute classic.
Extremely well done and thank you for this highly entertaining read.
One of the best stories I have ever read.
I appreciate your hard work and imagination.
Thank you,
Norman
by
Anonymous04/07/08
Brilliant
Great story, well thought out and well constructed.
I loved the way you developed the characters in the story,
you made them so real.
I hope you continue writing, this was truly a pleasure to read.
by
Anonymous08/11/08
No matter how you tie it, no matter how you
frame it, the slut did not love nor respect her husband. To keep him married to her, to even let him get a piece of her ass, is insulting to the man she was married to. He deserved better than that slut! Divorce quick and clean was the only way. You needed a story and kept them together forcing the husband to accept disrespect, infidelity, deceit, adultry, and humiliation. You made him into a shell of a man to make a short story long. Once a liar always a liar, once a cheat always a cheat, once trash always trash. This is the kind of girl you take out dancing and fuck then go home. Others were doing that while she was married to him. Just fuck her and forget her!
by
Anonymous08/20/08
great story
great story,
by
Anonymous08/23/08
BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do not pay any attn to the "nay sayers" --This is a great story -long but every page just gets the reader more involved-just almost like a spellbounder Hitchcock movie.I love the way you did it --one long chapter VS dragging it out!! I do have a question --whats Not To Like?
by
Anonymous08/30/08
One of the best
One of the enjoyable stories on the site; well balanced, realistic and honest.
My only question is why haven't you gone professional. Everything you write looks, reads and feels professional. I so admire your work.
I would have left my username but I have forgotten my password. If you would like to comment my mail is bkfriend at hotmail dot com
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Anonymous01/12/09
Despite the very long story that could have been
edited there is no reason or justification for her cheating on him and her disrespecr for her husband. And there is no real reason or justification for him taking her back. Fuck her all you like she is a slut, but dont move in with or marry her. It would make more sense to marry the total slut sister, and why he put his dick in her makes no sense at all since he was aware of who she was and what she does. Two sisters in the same family that are just plain sluts. Only problem was his wife is also a whore. She fucked people at work related to her job, she is a whore/prostitute! Personally I would not even talk to eather woman.
by
Anonymous03/10/09
Great - Great S T O R Y
Very nice writing...keep up the great work.
by
Anonymous03/16/09
Way to long
Perhaps paperbacks would be better for you longer writing.
by
Anonymous04/06/09
Unexpected
5 stars. It might sound strange, but this story was so well devised and presented that I nearly scored it a 4 stars, maybe even 3. Why? Before I was a fourth of the way through it I was seeing this story not as a ditty sitting out here on the internet, but as a serious piece of work, and I nearly graded it that way. It's a cut above. Besides that, it's nearly a parable or a testiment to what could be, if only... Sure, there was an element of luck in this story that helped save those two, in particular, Barbara's wise and perceptive grandmother, someone who could begin raising her and teaching her the things she never learned. Then, there's Kimberly. Kimberly is, by the way, the reason I thought of a pro-grade 3 instead of 5. Her introduction was a bit over the top I thought, and this persisted for about 4 pages. It seemed like the author was rushing a bit at this point. However, I realized later it gave the author the opportunity to present the sacrifice of Barbara. This story makes me feel good, and I'm glad I read it.
English
great story,where is papatoad
miss the stories of papatoad.your stories are the best.
great story
your story was touching and realistic. I was deeply touched by the characters and their development through their difficult times. Though not to that extent, I can definitely relate to this story to some degree. All the while I am beginning to learn about myself as well through your story. Beautiful.
The Best
I never expected to read a story of this calaber on Lit. This story is definaly worth main stream publication. This is the best story here!
The truest to life possibilities I’ve seen on LE
I was reminded about your story by a comment left today in Feedback and I had to read it once more. It is the finest example on this site of how a therapist works with patients to get them to delve into their own actions by first getting them into their thought process, what was in their mind at certain points and from their go back and pickup days and times that can lead to a start of perception. The benchmarks this stories therapist and patients had to deal with are a credit to your writing and imagination. This story fits into my understanding of people, fantasy or not. It has little to do with reconciliation versus divorce, as each person has their own emotional psyche to live with, what is acceptable to one will not work for another, and that fact is evident by comments left by people on this site and their makeup.
This is my favorite story of all listed on this site, and that’s says rather a lot as there are some truly exceptional fantasies and fictions here.
With the highest of regards
I thank you
Peggytwitty
damn
by far the best story i have read on lit..and i have have read a good deal of them
Awesome!
I am married and although none of this has happened to us, it made me think more closely about not only our sex lives but how we react to things everyday. I am so glad they got back together at the end and I thought it was a wonderful story!! Keep them coming!
i loved it!!!!
it was so very realistic and quite touching. i had a similar situation, though it didnt work out as merrily. i will find someone i still believe. thank you for this piece of literature of taste.
wow!
i rate this story 10/10!thank you!
Thoughtful
WOW 108 comments! I guess that along let's you know you have written a very well received tale. Let my voice join the chrous.
I thought you handled Steve's feelings very well. It leaves food for thought as I deal with some of the petty things in my relationaships. Thanks
Great
This is byfar the best and most realistic story I have read on this site. At first I thought I was never going to finish all 18 pages but I was glued to the screen. It was great,
This website is shit.
This website is shit.
It does now allow me to rate 1000 on a scale of 5.
Great one!
really fantastic story.
Bullshit
I stopped reading when the asshole that posted this story fed the two of them to a useless piece of shit counselor. What a waste of time. This broken marriage might have survived before the dumbass shrink was injected into the mix. You don't need a quack to tell you how fucked up you are. Only the happy trails idiots believe in this crap. So, they lived happily ever after. I'm just thrilled as I can be. Bullshit.
Book Mark it!!!!
There are good stories on this site. And there are some superb ones. There might be another one as excellent as this, but I doubt it.
This one is so good it should be used as the standard for all others to achieve.
Well done.
Very good!
Outstanding story. Great character developement, very plausable plot line.
But as most stories in LW seem to deal with cheating wives with their husband's consent, I kept looking for that to happen. I think this story might have been better placed in the Novels/Novellas category. But, that's just this idiot's opinion.
Jenny
The best story on Literotica!
Thank you for the best story I have read on this site. I read the whole thing at one sitting, I could not stop. A truly great job!
Fantastic
Without a doubt this is the best story I have found on the entire site. Plausible character development, unexpected plot twists, and an author who clearly understands both the pain of betrayal and the joy of reconciliation and forgiveness. My kudos to Longhorn__07 for this excellent contribution.
Yep, don't know how many times I've read this
but it's STILL among the best of the best,by a country mile
excellent
everything they said and more well done thanks
believable and educational
I thought the story was one of the best I've read thus far.
It was realistic and that it could actually happen anywhere.
I learnt a lot in terms of counselling and mediation techniques. One little critique, I guess, is the length the husband went to record his wife's misdemeanours. I thought that might have been far-fetched. Most of us would would divorce immediately, at the drop of a , er, pantie, not go to great explanations on the details of building up to the finale as it were.
crock
I despise and hate this fucked up stoy not because he got back with the whore, but because of the old bitch and his employeer interfering; NO employer has the right to hold my job hostage to my personal life, NONE, unless it directly harms the company (drug, etc). This was pure worthless horeshit wih no redeeming qualties
Wimp
Longest fucking WIMP story I've ever read. Big pussy with a big gun, and no balls. No wonder he couldn't keep his women.
Great Story
Although lengthy, very well written. It is a good display of what can go on in the minds of other people. Quite plausable,even if others don't feel that they personally would reeact this was. It is good that Barb had her Grandmother as a support, as well as other very fortunate factors, or there would have been nothing to salvage.
Cant believe he let the bitch back in
A slut is a slut is a slut. A cheater is a cheater and it is their innate personality, they will always be a cheat. No excuses not mental transfers, they are who and what they are and will never change.
Soap
Overlong sappy soapopera that I finally skimmed thru to find he had been totally hornswoggled the whole time. What a stupid cuck!
Best yet
Best story I've read here so far and I've read a shitload of them.
Bullshit
A piss-poor story of a dumbass wimp and worthless slut. I was smart enough not to waste my time reading each of the lousy pages.
great
very believable and im sure the detractors didnt read all the story or they to could see the real life emotion in this ...i truly enjoyed it .. a very long read but worth it ..maybe we could all take some lessons from it ...thank you roadbird
AT LONG LAST-A REAL 'LOVING WIFE' STORY!!
All believable, and a GREAT STORY!! THIS one took real talent to write. And the AUTHOR(as opposed to 'writer') is as talented as they come on this site. The only spelling inaccuracy was "Pouring over the documents". It should have been "P-O-R-I-N-G-", AND not "P-O-U-ring". But all that crap aside, this story was well thought-out, and very well-written. The characters were all well developed, and the manner in which they were all "brought along" was just superb! FIVE STARS for this one! And I'm a tough marker!
Excelent characterdevelopment.
Is the author a psychiatrist or marital consultant hem/herself? The maincharacters are very well defined and their development is very believable. It's a long read, but this also creates room for a realistic description of how deep the wounds, inflicted by such an affair, can get and what it takes to heal them. The style of writing keeps you wondering what the next chapter will bring. Well done.
A Very Moving Story
Longhorn_07 i loved the ending to this story they went thru hell and back and Steve and Barb shure learned there mistakes
With advice from ...
... HDK It took one day with some little breaks to read your story. I have to confess it's one of the best english stories I've ever read at Literotica
Nucleus
Just
another wimp(who used to be a man) selling his soul for a piece of sluts cunt.
A good man lost to lies and manipulation:
Too long! To long to get to the point. Heart breaking! A good man is tricked and trolloped. What really happens is an intelligent man is cheated on by a self-centered, selfish woman and her grandmother decides that inspite of how loathsome the GD is, she should stay married. So she manipulates the situation with money and power and tricks them back together. She is as selfish as her grand daughter. He needs to be with someone who is not selfish and manipulative and whose family respects him enough not to try to trick or influence him into something he clearly should not. He needs a woman who will love him and care for him and not just love herself. She wanted him back because she was selfish, not because she loved him. She does not change at the end. She wants what she wants and basically has a scheming family to help her. The nature of her personality is founded on a swamp that sucks the life of all around her: she is quicksand and will do what she wants and there is no absolute evidence at the end that she won't. HE should have run as fast as he could and never looked back. No divorce! Run anyway. IN time he would have got it. Years of a personality warping as much as his wifes had, do not change over night or even over years. No therapy or counseling is that good. She is a liar. What took years to make, takes years to revert if at all. Run, fella, Run!
Good story !!!!
Good story! She fought for her love. Accepted her sins and went through regrets. Well, she wasn't perfect. But the incidents made her to go to counseling and slay her demons. It matured her. She apparently had still been thinking like a high school girl.
And, he fought too. though he was forced on. But he did fight. And, one who fights is never a wimp.
After careful perusal
Longhorn:
I’ve read and reread this story a number of times and find that it appeals to me more than most on this site. I love the way you bring flesh to your characters and take the time to deal realistically with weighty issues. I also loved the feeling of continuity that you bring to the story. There were no tricky ‘artistic’ flashbacks, false clues, or discordant plot tricks. This was just a great story with a beginning, middle and an end. Sure there were things that I didn’t like. Lydia manipulating the husband into the prolonged counseling session: The husband’s inherent willingness to settle for forgiving past wrongs. The wife’s’ immediate acceptance of her ex-husbands’ (in his mind) infidelity with her sister. His acceptance of her continual disrespect for him during their short marriage, in my opinion there weren’t all that many happy times in the marriage. The counselors’ overlooking of the ‘suicidal tendencies’ expressed early in the sessions.
All of the listed issues are my opinions, and as the author you are totally in the right to take the story as you wish. Great job, very entertaining, thought provoking and a wonderful short read. Yes to me, this is a short read. I don’t understand all of the complaining on this site about stories longer than a page in length being too long to read. One commenter admitted to taking five days to read this story. Incredible and really sad! It probably took me less an hour to read it, online with all the delays inherent with reading over a somewhat slow interface. Others complained that it wasn’t erotic enough, with only 4 sex scenes. Give me a break; this story would have been boring with much more sex, and not believable. There was too much pain and confusion evidenced by the main protagonists to make it a suck and fuck extravaganza. Lastly the complaints dealing with contents for this site; the name is ‘LITEROTICA’ not eroticalit. Writing is by the title, implied to be more important. What is important to me, is a good story, well written that has some connection to something of an erotic nature. I applaud your efforts, it must have taken you many hours to develop and craft this story. I really look forward to reading more of your submissions. I am truly grateful to you for sharing your skill and imagination with us.
.
.
Unbelievably Beautiful
Having experienced being cheated on and getting revenge, I could identify very strong with this story. It's heartbreaking, disgusting, and very beautiful. Betrayal, revenge, forgiveness, hope, and love. You cut right into the very heart of it. You are a very talented writer. Thank you.
Beautiful Written
wow! It took me 9 hours to finish reading your story. It's a beautiful story, though it is long. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. You really took the time to take out the characters, exploring their emotions, their sexualities & their issues. I like the character of Lydia. She is the one who save their marriage. She is a wonderful grandma. The ending is beautiful done that give you a smile when finished reading it. Perfect 10 for you. --- Thor
A Masterpiece
Just read this and I think it's an absolute classic.
Extremely well done and thank you for this highly entertaining read.
One of the best stories I have ever read.
I appreciate your hard work and imagination.
Thank you,
Norman
Brilliant
Great story, well thought out and well constructed.
I loved the way you developed the characters in the story,
you made them so real.
I hope you continue writing, this was truly a pleasure to read.
No matter how you tie it, no matter how you
frame it, the slut did not love nor respect her husband. To keep him married to her, to even let him get a piece of her ass, is insulting to the man she was married to. He deserved better than that slut! Divorce quick and clean was the only way. You needed a story and kept them together forcing the husband to accept disrespect, infidelity, deceit, adultry, and humiliation. You made him into a shell of a man to make a short story long. Once a liar always a liar, once a cheat always a cheat, once trash always trash. This is the kind of girl you take out dancing and fuck then go home. Others were doing that while she was married to him. Just fuck her and forget her!
great story
great story,
BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Do not pay any attn to the "nay sayers" --This is a great story -long but every page just gets the reader more involved-just almost like a spellbounder Hitchcock movie.I love the way you did it --one long chapter VS dragging it out!! I do have a question --whats Not To Like?
One of the best
One of the enjoyable stories on the site; well balanced, realistic and honest.
Well done, you should be proud of this story.
Great Tale
I couldn't stop reading. Well done!
I really like your work
My only question is why haven't you gone professional. Everything you write looks, reads and feels professional. I so admire your work.
I would have left my username but I have forgotten my password. If you would like to comment my mail is bkfriend at hotmail dot com
Despite the very long story that could have been
edited there is no reason or justification for her cheating on him and her disrespecr for her husband. And there is no real reason or justification for him taking her back. Fuck her all you like she is a slut, but dont move in with or marry her. It would make more sense to marry the total slut sister, and why he put his dick in her makes no sense at all since he was aware of who she was and what she does. Two sisters in the same family that are just plain sluts. Only problem was his wife is also a whore. She fucked people at work related to her job, she is a whore/prostitute! Personally I would not even talk to eather woman.
Great - Great S T O R Y
Very nice writing...keep up the great work.
Way to long
Perhaps paperbacks would be better for you longer writing.
Unexpected
5 stars. It might sound strange, but this story was so well devised and presented that I nearly scored it a 4 stars, maybe even 3. Why? Before I was a fourth of the way through it I was seeing this story not as a ditty sitting out here on the internet, but as a serious piece of work, and I nearly graded it that way. It's a cut above. Besides that, it's nearly a parable or a testiment to what could be, if only... Sure, there was an element of luck in this story that helped save those two, in particular, Barbara's wise and perceptive grandmother, someone who could begin raising her and teaching her the things she never learned. Then, there's Kimberly. Kimberly is, by the way, the reason I thought of a pro-grade 3 instead of 5. Her introduction was a bit over the top I thought, and this persisted for about 4 pages. It seemed like the author was rushing a bit at this point. However, I realized later it gave the author the opportunity to present the sacrifice of Barbara. This story makes me feel good, and I'm glad I read it.
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