Loved your story! Very realistic. Anal sex rarely ever goes smoothly the first time in real life. I feel you captured that well!
I found the changing of perspectives very confusing.....
I liked the changing perspectives, and the way you explained about him getting 'stuck', a very sweet and romantic story, thanks!
Well written, and once I got used to the constant shifting back & forth in the narration, I enjoyed the story.
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Good story!
Loved your story! Very realistic. Anal sex rarely ever goes smoothly the first time in real life. I feel you captured that well!
I liked it but...
I found the changing of perspectives very confusing.....
Loved it
I liked the changing perspectives, and the way you explained about him getting 'stuck', a very sweet and romantic story, thanks!
the shifting perspective was interesting
Well written, and once I got used to the constant shifting back & forth in the narration, I enjoyed the story.
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