A Marriage in Turmoil Ch. 01

Let's summerize;

She brings up his old affair during every serious argument, she lost a lot of weight and is reveling in her new body, she is going out on a ladies night (bet all her friends are single) and dancing with all the younger men. Will she fuck around on him? Oh, hell yeah. She obviously remembers and is jealous that he had his indescretion all those years ago. She feels it is her right to be able to do this now. Will the marriage survive? In the real world; probably not, in a fantasy world, possibly.

Very nice setup!

The characters are nicely defined and the story could go any number of ways. Well written of course! I look forward to the next chapter!

Good story so far

I cannot get separating for two months after only one brief discussion, and him not telling her if she has sex it is more than likely over as he is a one woman man not into sharing or has any fantasies about her with other men. Two wrongs don't make a right.
Looking forward to where you are going with this story.

Nice set

up for the story DG, where are you taking it from here?

you need to take control of your marriage

you open the door by runnning away.she wants this why are you leaving home.go lose some at a gym and prepare for the worst.tell your childred there mother wants to play the field.get the pressure off the hubby and put on the one who wants to whore around.she marry to one man and want other men to fuck her,once she fucks someone else it all over with.

Interesting so far...

although I don't have high hopes for the marriage. Yeah he cheated on her, but at some point a spouse has to decide whether or not they forgive their partner, and not keep bringing up the affair whenever they have an argument. That Nancy kept throwing it in his face for so long tells me that she really never forgave him, and now she uses it as a weapon in arguments.

I do think you should have had a longer period of strife between them after she confessed to what had happened at the club. One conversation and they seperate is a bit of a stretch. Include more buildup to the split next time. Let them have a heated argument, period of indifference, maybe have him follow her again and watch her go just a little bit further, then have a major showdown with him telling her what he saw, and finally the ultimatum. That would have fleshed out the story more. This chapter was little too much bare bones, needed more meat.

Could lead anywhere

You have done an excellent job of ending this chapter on a cliffhanger.

You just wait

Great start, but you know i'm an impatient bugger.

DC

They are making postage stamps bigger

here in Australia.
I'll send some so you can fit a few more words into these postage stamp chapters.
No matter how good the overall story is I will be scoring 20 word chapters at 2.
As others keep saying, write the story and post the lot. How hard is that to do?

Nice start!

OK DG where are you taking us this time. Last time we went to Hell and back. by the way,it was an enjoyable read. I know better that to try to pre judge your characters. I'm usually wrong. I'll be here to the conclusion. AS for your readers. The story is good when you don't want to wait for the next chapter. That's the sign of a good writer. Just don't wait long to post between chapters.
A Fan!

Note from DG Hear!

I know some readers don't like short postings. I like to build some suspense in the story. I want you to come back and read the next chapter and the chapter after that. I want to hear what you have to say and where you think the story is going. That's why I still leave the comments open. It's for all of us to enjoy. The readers like your comments more than my stories some time.

If you are a reader that likes single chapter stories then wait a couple of days before reading mine. I try to submit them so they are posted daily until complete. If it will be more then one chapter I always put ch.1 in the title.
Well thank you for reading chapter 1. This is a 3 chapter story, just so you know.
Thank you
DG Hear

have some confidence

Of course we love to have suspense in stories. But you don't build suspense by
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stopping in the middle of a sentence. You build suspense with plot and character development. Are you saying that your stories would be a yawn if just told them? You have a following that believes you tell a good story. Just tell it. Requital was recently posted in a single post and it was very well received. Longhorn_07 did it with the story, not by breaking it up into agonizingly small bites.

If you think your stories aren't good, why post them? If you think they are, have the confidence to let us enjoy them in a single sitting.

Nice Work And Reasoning

Does everyone reading this also read a book from cover to cover at one sitting? Of course not. Probably like me, you read when you can a chapter or so at a time. Author feel proud in their complaints which are really compliments that they can't get enough of you - well maybe.

As to the husbands reaction to what he saw and what he heard from her(several months of touching and wanting ?)- remember if an author makes the offense too grevious then does a reconciliation most of us booo at the non-reality of the non-substantiated romantic reunion (called a wimp out). Here he has done it perfectly - offense bad but not too severe - open door - many directions to take credibly including reunion - so far.

You rascal - you have listened and heard - then tactically smart enough to leave it open - good show and perception on the comments except we know you like them too eh. with High Regard

Dear anonymous

You ask us a question, then answer it yourself:
"Does everyone reading this also read a book from cover to cover at one sitting? Of course not."
While everyone may not read a book right through, I DO! If I can put a book down, it ain't worth the effort, is it? If I fall asleep, I don't count that putting it down, I need to attend to urgent RL matters, that is not putting it down either.
The HUGE difference between my practice, or even that of people who read books in several sittings is that WE DECIDE WHEN/WHERE we will stop. We can go past where the author (who is NOT omniscient in all matters regarding reading) puts his chapter points or stop part way through a paragraph if that is our comfort point.
With these 200 word chapters we have no choice.
Authors should give their readers th echoice, not make it for them.
Post the whole story and let the reader decide whether they want to wander off every three or four words to do something else, or if they would rather read right through.
"I want to see where you think the story is heading", with "so I can laugh at you all when you guess wrong" added under the breath, must be one of the more ridiculous reasons I've seen yet for publishing a story in nano chapters.
This may or may not be a good story overall, but I get so annoyed with 4 minute bursts, in the end I couldn't care less.

NO... No! I can't watch

This guy is setting his wife up to fail. Even after his own infidelity he's walking away from her when she needs him the most. "I would die for that woman" .... yeah right. Somebody needs to shake this idiot until his teeth rattle.

Intriguing--And Only Natural

Very common sensed story, which could quite easily be true. I am looking forward to future chapters on this one, and it will be interesting to see if any pregnancies are developed by you or taken on by Nancy....even half nigger ones that involve a "big cock."

Agree with Kanga40 again

Also agree that "have some confidence" is right in that the author isnt even creating suspense by ending his chapters where he does.

DG Hear - I do like some of your stories but the short chapters drive me batty (not in a good way either). Unless there is a logical reason for breaking up a story (some stories do make sense to post in multiple parts but most of yours dont imo), please just post the whole thing at once and quit worrying about the numbers of views you get or number of stories you have posted. Your stories and your choice but I really do think your stories would be better without the micro-chapters.

HE is setting her up to fail?

HE is?
You gotta be joking. This guy has got it completely right.
She has never truly forgiven him for screwing around early in the marriage, and this is shown by....
"She always ended the arguments by throwing the affair up at me even though it was years and years earlier. I guess even though she said she forgave me deep down the negative feelings were still there."
Boy is he right about that.
Then he tells her how it is...
"Stop right there, Nancy. You have thrown that affair up to me for the last 15 years. You are not going to use it against me now to have an affair. Is that what you want, Nancy? My permission to cheat on me, to cuckold me, to make a wimp of me?........ Two months, Nancy, two months to decide if you want your freedom and new found sex libido or if you want to stay married to me. I have no idea what you are going to do but if you decide to be a fuck slut for anyone I'll apply for a divorce immediately. This two months is for you to decide what you really want, not to see how many affairs you can get in. I will just take it 'A day at a time' and suggest you do the same."
She has the kids. If she can organise to get out and see some guy, leaving the kids with a sitter, why would the husband want to even see her again? She is a big girl and now she has to make her own decision. If he stays home and tries to convince her, he will never know what she really would have decided, and she can always blame him later - same as she's thrown his affair at him for 15 years - for not letting her make her own decision.
No - he is doing the right thing - he repented and did right by her for about 15 years - now she has to decide between him and some strange cock. She is under no illusion about what he thinks so she can make a clear decision.
Hey shit, I better stop, this is longer than the chapter it is about!

You have at least one

one in your corner, great start. At first I thought the leaving was a little abrupt and premature, but after some reflection, not so. He followed her and witnessed her desire for another man, she confessed to that desire. She also confessed to two months of the same. The husband is correct in his action. He is saying to her, if this is what you want, then go for it, but you go it alone. See how you like the life of a divorced woman, single parent, and one wage earner family. He not only is forcing her into an advanced preview of what her life will be like, at the same time, he’s making a statement. There’s no way that he’s going to just sit by and watch the kids and take care of business as normal while she goes out and gets her jollies. Now she will have to worry what he is doing at the apartment. There is one other thing that happened that has dire consequences written all over it, the kiss. No one kisses a stranger, the touchy feely during the dance wasn’t much info, that could be passed off to drinking, but not the kiss, it said a lot. There appears to be much more familiarity between them than first meets the eye. I couldn’t help but wonder if he was seen by her or one of her friends at the dance hall, otherwise there might have been a whole lot more familiarity between them, and possibly no confession at home. Of course knowing your propensity for taking what looks like the normal on the outside with abnormal behavior behind the scenes, I wouldn’t presume to be presumptuous enough to have any idea where you’re headed with this story. I would bet though that I not only enjoy the ride but will like the end results as well.

The guantlet has been thrown?

The ball is in her court. I'm just wondering how she decides what she prefers? Does she go dancing and fooling around to find out? Does she sit down and think about the situation every night? Go to a counselor? What does HE EXPECT her to do? Sit at home untill he returns? Yes, I can easily see where this action of his could blow up in his face. She could well decide to determine just how much she likes having other men massage her body and she could be lost to him.
I thought she was pretty much asking him for help. What do I know?

Too short

I understand the desire of the author to stop at critical points and have some suspense. That's fine. However, one must also factor in having parts that are so short that they're over before the reader can really get into it. That' bad. This part was only 3,000 words. That's not enough. Just as soon as the reader is getting familiar with the character and the plot, it ends. Personally, I think a good rule of thumb is, if the part is long enough to go to two Literotica pages, then probably it's something worthy to sink one's teeth into. If it's only one page, then it's too short to stand alone as a part, no matter how great the cliffhanger. That's why people get mad at you for posting these multiparters, because these one page parts are just too short.

Love it DG!........and love where it's going!

I think you're a twisted bugger, so can sense you're possibly going to now tell this tale from the wife's perspective, some endearing prose about how she must emancipate herself after all these years of burdening herself with his infidelities. And very plausible it will be...NOT! I know of one real-life situation identical to this...she decided she needed 'her space' to go out on him, he stressed himself to a stroke over trying to reconcile with her. Now he's an invalid, she runs (& screws) around and o/s travels on the business income his previous years of work provides. Karma will befall her!
I also agree with GoodWifey, she put the plotline right into perspective, this guy is no pussy-whipped wimp cuckold to be...."either this way or the highway..Woman!"
I reckoned as good as it was "Requital" was a touch long in one hit. I don't really mind the short bursts, have a life to attend to between reads, bit of drinking here and there, other stuff...know what I mean. At times I just wait till all chapter posts on a story are up before starting. Don't stress over it! That your stories are so good that your readership have become so aggressive in demanding more bodes well for you DG.
Thanks you and I patiently await the next chapter in your good time. Cheers

Active mind!

Because I have one, I don’t mind short chapters. There’s enough in this chapter to get my mind whirling to mull over the plot. Often I work it out and the other times I get it wrong...C’est la vie...such is life.

Like eating a toffee, if it’s two chews and a swallow then you miss most of the flavour.

Looking forward to chapter2

Regards

Gee

what a great start more please... now lets see what she dose. One thing for sure she never forgave him for the other women and that may be her down fall now

Intriguing

I'm enjoying this. I like the suspenceful buildup and the tension. Looking forward to additional chapters.

Run away! Run away!

Wow, hubby thinks she might cheat. Wife is thinking of many things, including hit monkey multiple partner sex.
So supportine loving hubby evacuates.

Trouble in Paradise

DG:
Looks like another hit, but you sure do dig holes for someone at the beginning of your stories, and I love it. Thank You. Ronnie W.

the time to leave and let stupidity take over

the excuse the change of life and emotional problems have cause many divorces.she want her cake and eat it too.she is grown woman and she knows what she doing.let hubby find another woman and she will shit on him forever.

Sorry I'm not usually negative...

but the basic idea here is utter rubbish. The narrator has affairs and his wife forgives him. She on the other hand doesn't and he walks out. Come on! dual standards here! Keep it real. This story has got meso angry.

So let me see

So when he was unfaihful (and he admits it wasn't one time, but many) it was because he was "immature." And now that she's having similar temptations it's because she's menopausal, but he'd get rid of her ass quickly if she did. Can anyone say double standard? I think they are perfect for each other, but I'm sure we will have her as the villain because it's okay when he does, but not when she does it.

Good writing -poor plot

I always admire your writing DG, but this plot is pretty rediculous. What is his moving out for two months going to accomplish.If she is goingthrough mid-life crisis or whatever, his moving out is supposed to do what? I like your writing but your heros, for lack of a better word, always act like total dummies.
60 year old George

jumped premise

my problem with this beginning besides it's over-simplification is that you imply quite obviously that the wife is looking to capture the experience of variety that hubby once enjoyed, but you then jump to an adultery paradigm which actually exacerbates the simplification of what might have been a more complex cautionary tale.You are a better writer than that.Take your time!Pistolpackinpete

Love your work I've read most of it and will continue to do so.

This line made me laugh I'm afraid:}

She still feels like it was partly her fault. If she wouldn't have been such an idiot, it might not have happened.

Ya Thin?

Too Fast

The husband in this story moves way too fast in moving out. Counselling would have been the first option pursued if the character is anything like he was introduced as by the author. His ultra quick turn from questioning his wife to acusing her of all types of misbehaviour is mercurial and exacerbates rather than solves the problems.

Make no mistake, the immaturity of this asshole is what is driving this woman into other men's arms. I can feel very little sympathy for him because of it. DG, you swung and missed with this one!

I agree

It was abrupt.

Sorry more than 2* is simply not there

Your whole Story moves WAY to fast. There are supposed to be feelings transmitted but honestly I didn't feel anything even once. It reads like a technical manual.

Lets hope the latter chapters get better.

She will fuck around on him.

I don't know how it will end but he should man up and let her get laid, he got plenty in his time. I like to think that I would do that, not sure if I could.

I offer two scenarios that I could go along with... (This is my second comment.)

In the first scenario she fucks around on him and about her third man just beats the crap out of her and he nurses her back to health and forgives her. They live happily ever after.

Second scenario: it becomes an open marriage and one or the other falls for someone else and they divorce. They live unhappily ever after.

I gave it 3***

The jerk of a husband, way over reacted. After all, she is just an 40 year old hide. So why should he give a hoot if a man kisses her or even fucks her. It is not like she a sexy 30 year old or younger.

Dwhorecuck

You are unreal. Why don't you tell us all your real name and what date you turn 30 so we can all look for your obituary after you commit suicide to 'off' your 'old hide'. In fact, tell us when you turn 18 so we know to start the countdown.

Sorry, bud, but your 'old hide' comments are both inappropriate and not appreciated. The list is long of very beautiful women in their 40's, 50's, 60's or even older. Grow up.

How dumb can he be?

How dumb can he be? He walks out on her for two months as a solution to the problem. I think not. He needs to work on the marriage rather than run away. What a dumb coward!

this is dumb

work on your problem ,moving out creates a bigger problem.2 months .

I Agree That His Response Was ill-Conceived

But that's what makes the story interesting, isn't it?

Interesting

Will she screw around? Will this be revenge from fifteen years ago? We'll see...

Boring

Where's the sex? Boring so far.

talk don't run

Another hubbie running from the problem not talking and helping to solve the problem. Especially a knee jerk reaction to walk out within hours of hearing the problem.

Hopefully common sense and communication prevails.

Loving it

A great start. Five stars.

ditto - from a male

I agree with the comment entitled "talk don't run". Separating from his wife when she has physical needs is ridiculous; he's asking for more trouble.

@talk don't run

I agree.

If he leaves her to stew in her turmoil alone, you can bet she's going to weaken and look for some comfort elsewhere.

A better bet would be to take her away for a romantic weekend and screw her brains out!

Sorry

But his whining about her throwing his AFFAIR in his fack well then FUCK HIM