A Marriage in Turmoil Ch. 03

nice ending

kudos!

Great one! But...

...if he hit Ed in the face that hard with a fist full of coins he should have broken his fingers. Fingers tend to break more readily than jaws.

Just a little nit-picking. Good resolution to the plot.

It seemed somewhat anticlimactic

after the frist two chapters, but it was a nice ending.

Just To Say

that you are appreciated down to earth person - With High Regard

Great

Another winner from you. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future.

Boyd

Great story

And just to disagree with a previous comment. With the niclkles he would be less likely to break fingers and more likely to break the guys jaw. The extra wieght helps add power to break the jaw and the impact is transfered to the nickles which are pushed outward which is why the roll broke. Take it from someone that has hit someone with a role of quarter in his fist. It may hurt the hand a little more on the inside, but the fingers and knuckle actually hurt less.

Good ending

and you got there well enough.
But I still can't figure why you couldn't post all 3 pages in one go, and I cannot take all the crap about it being 'his' fault.
Other than those few peeves, a fair story.

Great Story, Great Ending

DG:
Once more you came through with an outstanding story. The ending made this Horny 'ol Sailor smile as I love a happy ending. About those nickels; When I was a hell raising young sailor I almost always carried a roll of coins of some kind on liberty and they stood me well on occasion. The denomination of the coins always depended on how close it was to payday. If you had time you could roll the coins up in your neckerchief, then you could really do some damage. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Excellent story!

Loved the story. A great story and a great depiction of the important aspect of marriage. Always Communicate and have NO secrets.

Too Cute!!

But you did it well....AGAIN!!
NEXT!

Nice but.........................

.......poorly written and the ass play at the end dropped it a couple of scores

Loved the

ending DG. But then again, I'm a happily ever after kinda girl. Sad endings always make me want to get my money back so you did wonderful. You are one of my favorites to read. Great job.

Nothing wrong with your writing

skills but!!!! the story started off with a big emotional bang, complete with mystery, depth, imagination, and balance. Chapter two was almost like reading two different stories, turned somewhat soft. Agree with Dynamite Jack, chapter three was anticlimactic but also so soft it was almost like a different author had written the final chapter instead of the DG Hear we are used to. It was a nice, sweet, and romantic ending, but I like and prefer the old DG better. After reading all the nice, sweet, and loving comments, may be that I’m all alone in this sentiment. No matter, I’ll be a fan always.

Nicely done

Thanks for a good story and a good read. Your telents are appreciated.

Loved it.

The only thing I've got to say is a message to our friend who can't understand what cliff-hangers are all about. They're fun and get your emotions up.

The only problem with them is when a silly writer leaves you waiting months for the next part. If it ever turnes up that is?

DG is no fool he wouldn't do that to his readers. He knows what he's doing and I'm sure other readers enjoy the suspence just as much as I did.

On with the next one DG.

DC

As always!

As always, I enjoyed your story. Like some of the other commenters, I'm a "happily ever after" sort of guy most of the time and really enjoyed this ending.
Again, as always, I'm looking forward to more from you.

Good Ending

Thanks for an overall warm and encouraging story. He came to his senses and got the job done (with his wife's help) at the end.

Everyone has fantasies about what other sexual partners would be like and what it would be like to be different than we actually are in our actions. The realization at the end of this story that your lover, husband/wife, life partner is the one to bring those fantasies to life is what makes this story a good one.

She should have shared her fantasies with him in the first place. He should have seen her need as soon as she confessed it and been there to bring her around. A few weeks of "happy life" were lost because of their failures, but the rest of their life should be happier.

Thanks for a good read.

Charleybear

I was wrong

I thought you were going to make this a typical story of the husband having to put up with a wife who wants to fool around. I was wrong. A good turn to the story. Still I wonder why he was the wrong one for becoming upset at his wife for letting men touch her. She said she wanted it but was upset when he walked out. Pam was good friend but I don't think she put enough pressure on her to keep her from falling off the deep end. Great writing. Keep up the good work.

Good one

As Kanga 40 likes to point out, where are the women with some
brains? She should like this one.

Great ending. I don't think I would have moved out like he
did, but it allowed the story some flexibility. It did give
the wife some "alone" time to see what life would be like
without hubby there.

Real good...what is next?

Wow! A real "Loving "Wife!

I loved it. Good job!

WOW I AM IMPRESSED

You are one of the better writers on here. I think this is one of the best you have written, looking forward to seeing the next one. Keep up the great work.......

Paul

Not bad. Naa, it was actually really good!

I'll be honest though, when you mentioned the husbands cheating early on, I thought it was going to be a revenge story even after all these years. I was starting to find it hard to feel bad for the husband, but after parts 2 and 3 it actually was sewn up pretty nicely and I was glad you had it work out the way it did. But personally, I wouldn't have minded it you had expanded on what was happening in that room. Even if it was a sit down with Nancy telling her husband what happened, or what other people observed.

But in all good story in all parts 1-3.

Great Read

Great read and a terrific ending. You threw a few elements into the first chapter story that had me thinking it was going to go one way and then you took it in the opposite direction. Thanks for not being predictable.

Great Read

Great job DG!! Like's been said by others...nice to read about a woman with brains!! Looking forward to your next effort.

Great!

I love your stories. They're suspenseful and interesting. Everything fits. There are no clangers. Thanks so much for your time and sharing of your talents.

Phil

Good

very good story loved the ending

Great ending (pregnant women are indeed sexy)

After Ch. 01 and 02, I thought you might let him have a go at the bad guys (such a lousy bad guy he wasn't worth a roll of quarters). Well done, DG.

A Great Love Story!

At first I thought that you were going to dump on the husband. In Scene 1, the husband learns that his wife is a flirt so he gives her space to decide what to do. Perhaps he overreacted but what were his choices? If things stayed the same or he ignored the behavior things were going to get worse. In Scene 2 the girlfriend intervenes and alerts him to the danger. The husband should have considered outside threats but he was not aware of the plot to get her. Lastly, in Scene 3 we have the great battle and the "knight saves the maiden from the dragons."

A great ending not rushed with no loose ends (I wish that other authors on this site would do a good job on endings).
Thanks for a super read!

SleeplessinMD

Note from DG Hear!

I want to thank all the readers for their comments. I enjoy most of them. I also learn from them. I do interject real people into my stories. I want the readers to feel real emotions when reading my stories. I try and feel them when writing them. By the feedback I get I try to improve in each writing. I also realize that readers like reading the comments as much as my story. I think that's a good thing. haha I didn't realize it till one reader pointed it out to me that I had 32 submissions and my first was posted in August of this year. Thanks again
DG Hear

Good Story Good Marriage

Glad to see things work out for the hero & heroine---and they were that in this story.

The outcome of this was not predictable---so finding out what was going to happen was an important draw to the narrative.

We'll wait & see what you come up with next.

playingcardcompany

Really Hit Home!

I can feel the turmoil in the wife...I'm so there! Faithful, in love, and reaching that age where hormones are wreaking havoc! The weight problems, the "rose-colored glasses", everything! Losing weight and having men, attractive men, notice. This story hit the nail on the head, about wanting and needing to feel wanted and needed...and needing to be honest in your marriage! Communication and trust, it's why 15 years and 5 kids later I'm still in love with the man I married! Keep up the great works! And thanks for hitting one home! K.

Awesome

I love it when the husband isn't a cuckold, neither of the spouses is perfect and end up together and deeper in love and committment...Thanks

Thanks for not being predictable DG !!!!

This was a real ‘loving wife’ story with a wonderful romantic ending (it’s a pity that so few authors on LITEROTICA have the skill to give us such nice, sweet endings)! Everyone has fantasies and it is not cheating to imagine - just wishful thinking and something to make masturbation more enjoyable when our ‘significant other’ is away. At the end of the day, our ‘life partner’ must be the one and only one to bring these fantasies to life. I too think that Jim acted like a “stupid son of a bitch with his head up his ass”, Nancy at least had medication and hormonal imbalance to justify her actions. Another truly enjoyable tale DG.

Really Sweet Story

You nailed it, buddy. As a woman, I can understand where she was coming, especially as we grow older. The husband was clueless to how to deal with his wife sudden out of control libido. Wish every married couple had such a wise and caring Pam in their lives. If so, more marriages might have been saved. Our hero understood and immediately corrected his thinking and behavior. As a true hero he saved his damsel and struck the bad guys away. LOL Just loved it. Thanks for the happy ending. It was a pleasure to read. Keep them coming.

Oh My God

What? No Way. Another stupid husband story.Change of life my ASS, she's a slut.

A moving story of Love

A great story with some secrets and fantasies of a marriage in a spin.

WOUNDERFUL, great love story .............. rich

Very Good!!!

Enjoyed the story alot, I agree it's really a loving wives story, that even with mistakes they could find their way thru and have a stronger and more understanding love at the end.

Sorry but exactly when did she get the problem

she had wantign men to touch and arouse her over with? The story switched streams in mid course. The problem was her going out and having men feel her up, not bosses at work. The husband did not give her the space to get over the bosses at work wanting her in the sack but her going out even on weekends and having men feel her up. That was never really addressed or corrected. Sorry the husband is sorry routine, the husband at fault routine, the husband ran away routine, doesnt work here. The real problem was not addressed or corrected. It may have led to the people at work wanting in her pants but she had to have known about that for a long time. Its almost as if you confused two stories and didnt finish either one.

oookay...

and now she's columbo?-hmmm and of course the busboys the moralist!Ain't that always the way!Pistolpackinpete

STRAIGHT TALKING

Thank God for people like Pam.
Is it just men can't tell a desperate appeal for help from an insult?
No, it's not; my wife used to shut me up if I told her what I was thinking!

absalutely brilliant loved it

A pure pleasure -

I decided to change my order this time and read the other comments before writing mine - I was very curious how many got it vs. how many didn't.

This story was read by a lot of bright people it seems.

You did great job with the cliff hanger and even got the hormone, birth control, late life pregnancy pieces in there beautifully. Good writing and real information too LOL.

I was truly pleased with the outcome and think the final scene is the fantasy most of us want in our own lives. Anyone who detracts credit simply because of the specifics of the sex is unbelievably narrow minded - oh well.

I wish you had more recent posts - I hope all is well.

Thanks yet again

Thank God for Pam.

There were mixed messages, and Pam was the one who kept the marriage from unraveling. Great Story.

Thank God

Nancy wasn't an idiot. And I liked the Pam character quite a bit.

Very good.

Superb story!

Extremely well conceived, written and executed

This one left me optimistic about human beings.

What Bruce said...

Not enough sex in this story but it was really a good, well-written story. I like happy endings.

Agree with comments about Pam

A marriage in trouble would have completely blown apart were it not for Pam. Probably a message for us all as to whether or not we should just stand on the sidelines if/when a friend of ours is going down the wrong path.

Wow

I wish I could have married Nancy.