a magical, haunting little gem!
If you drop "butterfly" and leave the line to read "gathering birdsongs and wings" it would be a great improvement and take away that butterfly/unicorn/bunny kind of cuteness. Of course, you can successfully use those words in a poem, but I'd toss this butterfly out. :)
I don't think you should change it it speaks from the mind of blue perfectly from you
I agree with Eve about the butterfly thing. The line also seems to have a better rhythm. I really liked
'daring to hide
glamour from the sun.'
I feel as if I have been listening in as butterflies share their little intimate secrets! Well Crafted! Enjoyable Read!
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