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by lobomao11/11/05

•) love it!

at our feet is a vortex
a wild whirl pool
of love life lust and tears
enjoy the luxurious moment
stay as long as you can
we come together
then come clean
and all is washed away

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by f-cynyr11/13/05

great shower.

well written poem, excellent description, and images. and a nice touch at the end, crossing the boundary into desire,. very erotic poem, and quit arousing.

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