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Very erotic and natural
Needs continued. How old is Susan? Perhaps she is young enough to start a baby with, if she comes out with the two of you the next night?
Fuckin' hot!
I did notice one or two grammatical errors or word omissions, like when he has his first orgasm, but otherwise that was great! And I'm from Indy so I know those places! Good job!
Could easily be better
As with your other stories, your sexual themes are hot, but your misogynistic attitude towards women makes them very pedestrian and cliche'.
Why treat a woman like dirt?
It's your story. The writing was passable but could have been better if you cared enough about your readers to proof it and correct it before submitting it. The attitude toward the woman turned me off completely. Too bad one of them doesn't treat you the same way.
good
fuck the grammer, i think it`s a hot story and want more!
Great reading!
This fantasy story needs to culminate with a baby in her belly from you.
Was
...fine with this one until the "11-inch" cock routine. So cliche! Your Babysitter story was far more realistic, believable and far better written.
I chose to read this one because I'm a Hoosier and was amused that someone would pick Indy for a setting.
But keep writing. We all have to grow over time!
I can't believe no comments in eight years
Just finished rereading all your stories. Several hours of good entertainment.
Thank you,
tom anon
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