Loved the story, especially ther ending...Just tell me that there is more to it!!!
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Anonymous11/15/05
Very erotic and natural
This one was going to be a '100' until he shot his cum on her face. I was hoping that without the concern for a condom that he was going to knock her up. Somewhat of a disappointment because shooting sperm on a woman's face does not make her preggie.
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Anonymous11/15/05
How very appropriate!
When she said video I had a feeling that some thing was going to change dramatically and I think it was perfect.
Now what? They're even, oh no, Tom is going to have a chat with his little wife and then they are going to decide what will follow. The very same I'll bet. Las Vegas was the give away. That was no coincidence. Well done!
You got half way there and then you shot your cum on her face. You should know that she was interested in possibly having his baby, but babies are not made by shooting cum on a woman's face. This story would have easily been a 100 if it had not been for that. Perhaps a continuation is in order, where they develop their affair further and she does get pregnant by him while her hubby is gone? If you don't know how to write this to that extent, perhaps someone needs to by plagurizing this story into something very erotic, with one or two pregnancies involved?
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Great Story, Wonderful Ending!
Loved the story, especially ther ending...Just tell me that there is more to it!!!
Very erotic and natural
This one was going to be a '100' until he shot his cum on her face. I was hoping that without the concern for a condom that he was going to knock her up. Somewhat of a disappointment because shooting sperm on a woman's face does not make her preggie.
How very appropriate!
When she said video I had a feeling that some thing was going to change dramatically and I think it was perfect.
Now what? They're even, oh no, Tom is going to have a chat with his little wife and then they are going to decide what will follow. The very same I'll bet. Las Vegas was the give away. That was no coincidence. Well done!
Ah, yes, honey, so that's where you were
Yep, I was sure of the film too. Well, they can have some wild foursome sex now.
My comment was going to be about how dumb the ....
......story was but the ending changed all that
Breeding time?
You got half way there and then you shot your cum on her face. You should know that she was interested in possibly having his baby, but babies are not made by shooting cum on a woman's face. This story would have easily been a 100 if it had not been for that. Perhaps a continuation is in order, where they develop their affair further and she does get pregnant by him while her hubby is gone? If you don't know how to write this to that extent, perhaps someone needs to by plagurizing this story into something very erotic, with one or two pregnancies involved?
That's terrible
However, I rated it 4 stars.
DWmoroncuck is terrible
because being a pedo is terrible
Sequel
You should write part 2 about how his wife was seduced by the neighbour, and a full account of what happens on the video
Interesting twist
The last line said it all
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