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It was okay
I have an odd feeling of ambivalence about this sequel. It’s not bad but it doesn’t come close to having the kind of impact that the original had. It has an open ended finish that seems to suggest a third chapter. I wonder if you planned this chapter from the beginning or if it was an afterthought?
Sorry,
even if it sounds hard, but I've to state: This well written sequel is unnessary!
Bavarian
Now
it's his fault and the tapes didn't affect him as bad as he said at the time. He should have just confronted her and forgive her then. Right.
Being a sucker for a happy ending!
I enjoyed it. I think, however, that it is rather unlikely that two attractive, apparently intelligent people wouldn't have developed intimate relationships with others over all that time.
However, I'm a sucker for happy endings!
I enjoy the way you explore the characters' emotions and self realization. I'm looking for a way to do that better in my own stories. It will help if I have more of yours to read.
Thanks for your time, energy and talent.
Well Written
I enjoyed the sequel as much as the original. Both worked just fine for me. I guess 5 years is enough of a sentence for her to pay for her transgressions.
thecelt has become an author I look for in the new postings section. And he has yet to disappoint.
thebullet pretty well covered it!
Five years allowed time for atonement. Sure, her reasons were poor for the affair, but she showed her mettle over time. It's good to see a smart classy woman!
I liked the counselor’s conclusion: “I was self-absorbed and selfish… and curious!” That makes a lot more sense than saying “I was bored. It was only sex!”
I like happy endings when it makes sense from the story flow.
Kudos to a great new author!
well done
Love the sequel and happendings. Time fixes a lot of things. they both made mistakes and are fixing them. Its good to sse a story about a lady who trully made a mistake and kept herself for a second chance.
Well......
I got mixed emotions on this one.
On its own its a really good story. It seems to have some good balance to it.
But to make it a continuation of a previous good story seems to make the previous story weaker. =(
By that I mean you took the husband, the person in the story who was cheated on and wronged, and put him in a position where (once again) the wife was was able to find various guys who couldn't wait (and one who did) to get in her pants. A story where the husband sat back and not only cooled his heels during her affair where she was doing her best to keep him in the dark about what she was doing, but through omission made it seem like he had no other real life outside of her. That he couldn't live a life or experience other women unless it was with his wife. You seemed to give him back some self respect where he not only left, explained why he left, but also went after a divorce. But in this story you seemed to back it all out, while reconciling them.
That is one thing that always bothers me in most cheating wife stories from Literotica. The wife is very "easily" able to find various men to take out for sexual test drives, yet the husband sits in a dark corner slack eyed and drooling on himself. He seems to be the guy no other woman will touch, seems that no woman has intrest in, if divorced no other woman will ever pass through his life, until the wife gets caught or, if they stay married, she somehow manages to get the cheating out of her system and the "celibate" husband finally makes up his mind to take her back. But until he does, all he has to look forward to is a life of loneliness, hurt, and celibacy until he gets back with his wife/ex-wife. In the previous story, the wife didn't get caught because the husband was smarter than her. She got caught because the guy she was with was bragging to everyone in ear-shot. But the husband found his self respect and left. Now in this story he pined away just as much as she did and didn't even try to find out if there was ever anyone else will to be commited to him. Just the life of a lonely monk I guess.
But again, it was a good story if it was a stand alone one. But to me it does greatly diminsh the original story by making the husband seem "less" disirable a mate to other woman and only one woman is willing to have him so he has to wait for her, while various men are all willing and getting a taste of his wife/ex-wife. And though omission to me it seems like he had a lack of a sex life for 5 years after he left his wife who was all to happy to get a little on the side to "help" him improve his sex life by getting some extra sexual experience from another man.
But that is just my personal opinion though for what its worth. (^_^)
Your best is
excellent, loved it. Fit superbly with the first half. I do have some questions about these five year spans, didn't hurt the story, but begs to question real life. People change so much in a five year span, hard to believe they could truly still be in love with someone after that long. Are they in love with the memory of the person they left behind five years earlier, or are they in love with the real person and all the changes that person has grown into. Married couples survive by living and growing together. We accept all the changes, because we never actually see them. The changes occur slowly day by day and we slowly adjust with them day by day. Coming back five years later would have you facing the full impact of those changes without the benefit of having been able to adjust to them. A great story though. A fan always.
huh??
This is a good stand alone story but a sequel to after the affair, it fails. you convenietnly forgot what you wrote in chapte1 all in the name of a happy ending.
Here we have the wife say,
"OK. One of the things that I wanted to say when you waved me to be quiet that night was about the video that you watched that you said you couldn't forget. Well, here's something that might have helped you. Do you know what I was thinking in the video when you saw me doing what made you decide that you couldn't forget? I was thinking 'I wish I knew how to suggest this to Perk so that he and I could do this so that I could actually enjoy it'. As a matter of fact, I was usually thinking of you when I was with him. It was a simple matter of you being so much better than him. I always wanted to rush home to you after one of those afternoons just to feel better."
True in chapter1 she says, “I had never done this with Perk and I wondered how I could begin it with him.” but not in the context she wants us to believe. The whole dialog was, " Fuck me hard, you bastard. Use that cock and drive it deep inside me. I want you to fuck me as hard as you can." He loved that and I got a thrill from it as well. I got so turned on when he talked to me that way. I had never done this with Perk and I wondered how I could begin it with him." so, perk was just an afterthought bec they have never done it.
while we're in the subject, what else does she want us or perk to believe?
1. perk was a better lover and she thought of perk when she was with him. really? In chapter1, she says, "I enjoyed the sex because it was different and I finally knew what the other girls were talking about. I never thought, 'this is better than Perk' or 'Jason is a better lover than Perk' or anything like that. I didn't compare you and Jason because you and I made love. Jason and I had sex. Do you see what I mean? I never thought of you because it was like a different life.
2. she didn’t enjoy sex with jason that much, with her saying, "I just did it to see what it was like and didn't quite know how to stop it. It was such a poor excuse for lovemaking and it really wasn't something I looked forward to. It certainly wasn't worth what it cost both of us"
really? but in chapter1 clearly she said the following:
"Fuck me now, Jason. I can't stand much more of this. I'll cum on your hand if you don't put that beautiful cock into me now!" I was squirming and twisting and was so close that I could almost feel the pleasure of an orgasm”
"Yes, yes, yes! Fuck my cunt with your hard cock. Give it to me. Harder!" The words came so easily now after the previous times. It had been difficult at first but I began to enjoy it and it became easier and more exciting. I was learning to be a slut
Jason pounded into me like a madman! He was like a man possessed. He came so hard that it surprised me. I held him tight to me while I felt his seed spurt into my vagina. As he spurted, I came! Wonderful. Dirty. Cheating. All feelings that made this afternoon worthwhile.
We rested for a time and began all over. This time I got undressed and Jason fucked me doggy style. He was able to last longer and he pumped into me for all he was worth. He was giving me the fucking that I had come for and I let him know I enjoyed it. Later, I gave him a blowjob while he ate me out, 69 style, and then I sucked him to get him hard again. We fucked missionary style again, this time was slow and sensuous and felt good.
Now, those don’t sound like a woman who didn’t sex with the man she’s with. And also, in chapter1, we know she wore things for her lover she never wore for her husband. Now, does that sound like she didn’t look forward to be with the guy. She even brought an overnight case to stuff her things.
If you intend to write a sequel where you reconcile the couple pls remember the facts in the the original story. the wife lied, lies and will lie to get what she wants. is that a good basis for a new life together.
I don't know
On it's own merit this is a good story.
But as a sequel?
*shakes head*
Just didn;t...'do it' for me.
I guess it was the twin devils of 'aftermath' stories that I see.
1) She moves on and gets a lot of attention. Counciling, men falling over her, good job, fun life ETC. And the husband?
He languashes in regret and pain. No women does he chase. His job doesn;t go anywhere, he never has a chance unless he takes her back.
and
2) FIVE YEARS AGAIN!!!
What is the facination with 5 years? Story after story has the man coming back after 5 years and the couple getting back together.
why five? why not 3 or ten?
Who started this trend?
Well off the little soapbox now.
thecelt, you are quickly becoming one of the best around, I can't wait till you post again.
my problem
my problem it isn't the rewriting charactors, and it isn't the convient forgetting/lying. well, that too, but others have covered that below. and some of that you can blame on time, some.
it is the suddeness. 5 years of aviodance, of pain - and poof! it is all gone. huh? what, a drive-by fairy came by with her magic wand?
there was no "polite" time, no "uncomfortable" get togethers. it was just "oops, 5 yrs is up, there is the bell, and all is forgotten/forgiven." No flashbacks, no inconvienent unhappiness, no distrust. That is unreal, and if feels unreal, and weakens the story IMHO.
Okay but unneeded
I love a happy ending as much as the next guy but while your first story was powerful this one just seems unneeded and formulatic.
Her statements seem too self mitigating. She says she was thinking: 'I wish I knew how to suggest this to Perk so that he and I could do this so that I could actually enjoy it'. But when I reread the first story it is quite evident that she did enjoy it. Sure she wanted Perk to do it too but having Jason doing it to her was just fine. She liked it and had no intentions of ever stopping. Not until she got caught.
Also "I always wanted to rush home to you after one of those afternoons just to feel better." OH PLEASE!! The afternoon Perk leaves her she spends a great deal of time reminiscing and getting excited all over again on just how well Jason had just screwed her. Let's remember her words from the first story: "I was wet and willing and ready to be fucked senseless!" "Wonderful. Dirty. Cheating. All feelings that made this afternoon worthwhile." Oh yeah, she was really suffering. Amazing how a little time can alter our remembering of what really happened.
Now you have Perk taking some of the blame on himself: "I wasn't thinking rationally", staying away was a "mistake that ended our marriage," "we both screwed up." Ohhhhh Man! No. No. No.
After five years Perk is still so messed up that he wants her back? Okay. But let's keep the guilt where it belongs.
Interesting point: Both children had gone on to marry since the divorce but Grace says she and Perk never attended any functions together. One of them missed the weddings? Big ouch.
Okay story but I really feel it did not need to be "revisited."
MF
Insted of writting this type of story you should save your energy so that you can fuck your Mother.
Great read
I loved this story. It is so sad to see a happy marriage being broken. Thank you for this wonderful story. You proved that even though she cheated she is still a good person. thank you
ok,but
overall i enjoyed the story,and i am a believer in forgiveness and reconciliation.
the only part i found disappointing is a inconsistency in Grace's charactor. to quote........
" "OK. One of the things that I wanted to say when you waved me to be quiet that night was about the video that you watched that you said you couldn't forget. Well, here's something that might have helped you. Do you know what I was thinking in the video when you saw me doing what made you decide that you couldn't forget? I was thinking 'I wish I knew how to suggest this to Perk so that he and I could do this so that I could actually enjoy it'. As a matter of fact, I was usually thinking of you when I was with him. It was a simple matter of you being so much better than him. I always wanted to rush home to you after one of those afternoons just to feel better."
"Now, you could ask me why, if you were so much better than him, I didn't stop. That is something that a full year of counseling couldn't answer. I just did it to see what it was like and didn't quite know how to stop it. It was such a poor excuse for lovemaking and it really wasn't something I looked forward to. It certainly wasn't worth what it cost both of us" "
i think thats inconsistent with the feelings she expressed while telling her tale in the first chapter.
overall,pretty good story. will be looking for more stories from you.
regards.
don
I enjoyed it.
Very nicely done. From a female point of view, most men would not be this forgiving, even 5 years later. The macho factor would kick in.
Undoubtedly.....a Great Story
Congrats TC, very well done. Good character portrayal and emotive versing of the plotline.
That's where I also agree with some of the commenters, the plotline flaw/s. For such good writing style, it was just a pinch contrived and repetitive of others in this genre, who along with you this time round, trot out this 'after the affair' formula to suit some Mills & Boon type reconciliation scenario. For example, she goes from slutting around with a gym hunk to being in total remorse and celebate for five years? He's a completely broken and betrayed man, but also goes five years as celebate and dis-interested in female company? Give us a break, writers!!
I'd see a guy like Perk, taking a goodly time to recover his senses, confidence, self esteem, and motivation to live life and move forward. Let's say a year or so, inside two for sure, then some friends start encouraging him out and lining him up at functions and dinner parties with ladies. Slowly he starts to enjoy companionship, being close to females in a relationship sense, and even some loving again, and THAT is what brings him to realise that he still loves his rightly discarded wife after all. Five years of a monk like existence, imho, wouldn't bring him to that realisation, it could make the type of getting back together portrayed here more problematic and likely to fail due to insecurities, haunting doubts and memories.
Then there's Grace, knows she's a tramp, adulterer, low bitch etal goes to a course of councelling to find out.......that she's a tramp, adulterer, & low bitch. I doubt it, half decent councellors would get her to move on with life also. For the purposes of these stories, the offending parties somehow imposing on themselves this self imprisonment of no dating, no contact or relationship with the opposite sex, makes the plotline emotive and shows a powerful penance for the 'crime', but frankly isn't hardly believable.
You did right though, in that you know it's inplausible that Perk or any other usual spouse would do anything other than walk out and sever all ties in the event of blatant betrayal. And likely to do much more, very much more if you know what I mean. So this strong willed, non wimp, non cuckold type guy Perk is, rids himself of her sorry arse, and rightly so. But you're a reconcilliation sympathist (this time round anyhow) and you're looking for a way to literally engineer it. Look out the window, over the back fence, in the lunchroom at work...there's hundreds of cases around you where a shattered marriage has reformed...and they're all good stories too. So we can all leave the five year celebate self exiled option here? Can we? Huh?
What about the one where they get back together after both having a few hot n heavy sexy & romantic attempts with others, finding that these affairs are just that, fun and exciting but emotionally barren when your heart really belongs elsewhere. There's nothing wrong with writing love stories here, but we also need good doses of pussy pounding too!
Thanks TC, like your style and DO WANT MORE!
Doesn't hold together
Okay, we've heard from her how she's been true to him after it's too late. But how does *he* know? Since he'd cut off communications with her, for all he knows, she's been having occasional or even frequent assignations with young studs. Or so she says. So even if she's repented and atoned, he'd have no way of knowing it.
Okay, she could have told her daughter-in-law, who then told him, but she's already established herself as a liar and by her own admission, self-serving, so if she'd done that, it could have been a fiction to get back together. That's the problem with being untrustworthy, it's impossible to prove good intentions.
So, from his point of view, five years have passed, but nothing's changed. She doesn't offer an explanation for her actions, or any kind of assurance that it won't happen again, except her saying so, along with how she was thinking of how much better he was the whole time she was betraying him. Man, if his bullshit detector didn't bend the needle when it pegged, he can't be as successful in business as he's made out to be. Besides, it's the word of a proven liar. Sorry, but his change of heart just rings false.
Agree with most regarding
- inconsistencies between part 1 and part 2
- unrealistic that husband would still be pining for ex after 5 years. Reasonable that he would be broken up over his loss for a long time but seems to me that he would have moved on to other women before deciding he wanted his wife back. If he did decide he couldnt live without her, it would have to go through another relationship or two before he got there imo. Seems like a missing link here and/or perly is pretty pathetic (as someone else mentioned, that he only has the option of forgiving her or being alone seems pretty harsh)
- seems really odd that a woman who would cheat on a guy she supposedly loves would suddenly become celibate after he left. Seems odd that she still wants him back (or he wants her) after 5 years with no contact. Doubtful that either has much in the way of strong feelings for the other after this long apart.
- I agree with the macho factor post as well. Much as it pains me to admit, I do think the guy would be more likely to wallow in his own misery (not that he should have stayed miserable) than try to make up with the ex after cutting himself off from her for 5 years.
My guess is that you are going for a part 3 when we find out he was suckered again. Between the way you wrote her in part 1 and then even made her seem kinda shallow and stupid even in part 2 when she is supposed to be all remorseful and such, it seems like you are just setting us up for another fall. She doesnt seem to have many redeeming qualities and she also seems inordinately fond of herself. Seems like she knew that her pathetic ex would come crawling back if she just waited him out and that she could once again grace his unworthy being with the gift of her magnificent body.
I know its a story about the woman and from her pov but its still kinda sad that she believes (rightfully so it seems) that her looks are enough to let her do whatever she wants. Would have been a happier ending for me if Perly had found a good relationship with a woman who wasnt so stuck on herself. She could have had fun getting her ego stroked for a couple more years by fucking younger guys with old lady fetishes as well. Everyone would have been happier & gotten what they really wanted and you wouldnt have had to try so hard to pound a square peg into a round hole.
Even though I didnt think it was a very happy ending (for the guy mostly), it was still a good story. I was happy to see that you carried on with this one since I really liked the first part (and this part as well). Thanks for writing.
Very good.
Very enjoyable story. It's always good to have something like a happy ending. Always better than animosity.
Sharon kept him advised to what Grace was doing and not doing. Missed that?
Reconciliation At All Costs!
I agree with the other commenters that this sequel was unnecessary and actually detracts from the first story. There were real inconsistencies in the main characters.
Grace talked about feelings for Perk during her sex with her stud contrary to what she expressed in the first story. Unless you are conveying that she rewrote history to get back with Perk her statements 5 years later about this affair makes no sense. I buy the curiosity for starting the affair but based upon her comments in the first story she would have not stopped her affair! She had no guilt about this affair. Only when she was caught did she consider what she lost.
Now Perk on the other hand seems to take 50% of the blame for the divorce even though he spent months thinking about reconciliation. It almost seems as if he was waiting 5 years for her "to serve her time" and then all is forgiven.
He blames himself for the silence as if he woke up one morning and said she is not that bad. I fully expected him to introduce her to his new fiancee during dinner to show that he has truly moved on. Remember he had the tape showing Grace enjoying sex with her stud better than she has ever had with him. He was a successful, handsome businessman who had raised two kids. Why would he settle for being second? One reason might be that the kids had been working on him to get them back together.
However, her pennace for her affair seems so unrealistic since she listened to her girlfriends in the first place. They would have been encouraging her to move on, saying "you are not getting any younger," and "what about him."
Having said the above, the story was very well done. Good emotional interplay among the characters.
It is just this reconciliation at costs scenario really cheapens the relationship. If they were soulmates hurt by this single stupid act (acts in her case) then he would not have left and they would have worked it out. If they had the type of marriages which is typical (two people who get together because they have more in common than not) then they would have gotten divorced and moved on.
No matter how it is characterized cheating is the ultimate show of disrespect to the loving spouse. That is why it raises such an emotional storm that everyone can relate to.
The idea that 5 years of no dating means that she is a reformed woman or 5 years without her in his life begs the question what really changed for these two people. After all they had spent 25 years (probably the most difficult) together building a life.
Finally, there is the trust factor. Perk must know that if he had not caught her she would still be cheating. If they get back together is the fear of losing him that will keep her faithful or the memory of the pain she does not want him to go through again? While she was married she had the sex and the love. Perhaps if she dated and found the sex alone leaves her unfulfilled then perhaps her curiosity would be satisfied and that temptation would no longer have a hold on her.
Once again, a well written story but the premise seems contrived and artifical. Thanks for an interesting and thought provoking read!
SleeplessinMD
Day Dream?ٌٌ
If I believed this, it is inconsistent. It ruins the origianl story. So, I simply take it that the wife was lying here. Nothing of what she told in this chapter really happened. It was just a day dream.
Impressed
I never read the prelude to this story but all I can say is that it is certainly refreshing to get another aspect to this whole infidelity thing. The fact that she was truly sorry for her affair makes this an enjoyable read and reconcilliation and forgiveness after 5 long years is not a hard stretch. I look forward to the next installment. Well done!
This Was a Poor Follow On to a Great Story
I have a bone to pick with you on your story. I really disagree
with you on this one point.
Quote:
"Come on Mom, I want both of you there. This is not about you and
dad. This is about my son and his grandparents. You know Sharon's
parents are dead and you are the only grandma and grandpa he will
have. I think you and dad had better get over this crap and make an
effort." Bill was certainly a surprise. I guess parenthood makes a
boy grow up fast. "Anyway, I talked to dad and he is OK with you
coming. He is definitely going to be there."
End quote
Who does Bill think he is???!!! I want him to put himself in his
father's shoes and have HIS wife of 30 years cheat on him with a man
half his age and watch it all on video and THEN tell his dad to "get
over this crap and make an effort." I seriously doubt he'd feel
much different from the way Perley feels.
However, now you've shown that Perley IS going to be at the party
with her and now, and I will be very surprised if this doesn't
happen, despite all the humiliation he's felt and all the anger he's
felt, he's going to see her and fall madly back in love with the
cheating slut. I will be really disappointed if this happens but I
won't know for sure until I finish the story. I'll be sure to let
you know how I feel at the end of my reading.
*****
Quote:
"I was wondering. Would you like to have dinner with me sometime
next week? We could go to Pierre's. I believe that was one of your
favorites."
End quote
Aw Man!!!???? It seems that not only does time heal all wounds but
it also makes all men STUPID!! Is he really doing this? He's just
made peace with his ex, couldn't he leave it at that? It seems that
he's let go of the anger he's had at her and moved on but now it
seems that he's not moved on at all if he's asking her out for a
frigging date! That's what this is and no amount of window dressing
is going to change that.
*****
Quote:
"OK. One of the things that I wanted to say when you waved me to be
quiet that night was about the video that you watched that you said
you couldn't forget. Well, here's something that might have helped
you. Do you know what I was thinking in the video when you saw me
doing what made you decide that you couldn't forget? I was thinking
'I wish I knew how to suggest this to Perk so that he and I could do
this so that I could actually enjoy it'. As a matter of fact, I was
usually thinking of you when I was with him. It was a simple matter
of you being so much better than him. I always wanted to rush home
to you after one of those afternoons just to feel better."
End quote
Please, don't insult my intelligence. All the time she was getting
her ass screwed off by a younger guy she's thinking about her
husband and how she'd rather be doing this with him so she could
enjoy it but she's to 'afraid' to suggest it. Is that REALLY what
you want to say, to your readers, and from her to Perley? Do you
even realize how stupid and selfish that sounds?
I really liked your first story because you didn't go into a lot of
these stupid cliched excuses and now the first thing out of her
mouth is this. Man that's pitiful. I'm sure it would have helped
him to forget her telling her boyfriend to fuck her harder if he
knew that she was thinking of him the whole time. I know it would
have helped me. It would have helped me put my hands around her
cheating neck and kept me squeezing until she stopped talking. Of
course since she loves him so much she'd probably be thinking about
how much she wants to be with him instead of her boyfriend, at least
until she stopped breathing.
*****
Quote:
"We both screwed up big time.
End quote
Is this whole story going to be stereotype excuses. Now Perley is
blaming himself because he was hurt, humiliated and treated as if
his love didn't matter to the woman he adored. Yeah, he screwed up,
big time alright, by EVER having anything to do with this woman
outside family events.
*****
Yep, all is right with the world now that Perley wants to be back in
HER life. If this guy is as handsome and rich and all that why are
there no other women in his life? Is he, like all the other men in
these reconciliation stories, her soul mate, and thus immune to the
attractions of other women? He must have absolutely no friends who
might try to fix him up I suppose. Oh, I know, ALL his friends and
family know he loves Grace so much that when he FINALLY smartens up
he'll realize the error of his ways and go back to Grace so they
aren't going to even try to fix him up with anyone else. If he's
kept lonely he'll get over his little hissy-fit sooner and go back
to Grace where he belongs, after all she loves him like no other
man, THAT'S for sure. I just hope my wife doesn't decide to love me
like that, I don't think I could take it.
I don't understand how he could see this woman as anything but the
person who screwed another man, as she says, for no other reason
than because she was curious! How callous can a person get? How
selfish and empty can a person be? And the most important question,
how can he not see that the person he fell in love with ISN'T this
woman if she could do that to him?
She is right about one thing though. She CAN do whatever she wants
for her pleasure and Perley will support her. It may have taken
five years, but she WAS right. His 'love' for this person, who only
thinks about her own pleasures and expects, as is her right, her
husband to be supportive of her pursuit of those pleasures, this
love allows him to ignore what five years ago tore him up so bad he
was physically ill.
Some may think that she paid a price for her affair, but it's not
much of a price since he's kept her in beer and skittles and wanting
for nothing. She's really not learned much of a lesson if the first
words out of her mouth to Perley in a private setting were what I
quoted above. I don't think I'd have had the balls to tell the man
I supposedly loved that I only wanted to do this with him but I
couldn't so I went out and got it elsewhere, and that the whole time
her boyfriend's cock was running in and out of my cunt I was really
thinking of him. (Insert plenty of sarcasm here, please.)
I don't know why you didn't bother to have Perley propose at the end
of the story because we both know that he's going to, some day, and
probably soon. She's going to have her loving Perley back and for
the rest of their days they'll be able to play with their
grandchildren together.
I think she'd better have another talk with her daughter-in-law
though, an update as it were. She needs to get across the lesson
that, despite any dalliance she may have with another man, she can
still get her husband back if she besots him enough that he can't
live without her, as long as she doesn't date or fuck anybody else
while the divorce plays out. All she has to do is cry her little
eyes out, tell him over and over how sorry she is, and oh by the
way, I was thinking of you the whole time I was screwing that other
guy, then all will be right with the world.
What a sad example she is to her daughters-in-law, and her
biological children. I wish them all the justice in the world, just
like their mother got.
I also see Perley as a sad example to his children. He is a poor
example of manhood, in my opinion. I'm NOT advocating that he hate
Grace for the remainder of his days, as that kind of hate eats away
at you. But I also don't advocate that he take her back either. He
should be civil to her in family gatherings and also move on with
his life. All he's showing his children is that he must have been
an unreasonable ass because he divorced their mother over a 'little
mistake'. He's PROVED he's an unreasonable ass because he's now
admitted his original decision making process was wrong since he's
taking her back, and we all know they will be married again, so
please do not deny it.
It seems that he's proved to his children that he was too childish
to accept that his wife of 30 years pursued her happiness with
another man and he didn't like it. He wanted his toys, his
property, to be his and didn't want to share them with others as
that is the only conclusion I can come to. I do hope his children
learn from their father's mistake and share their precious spouse
with another if it makes that spouse happy. After all it is the
only adult thing to do. Maybe Perley should apologize to his
children as well for not learning to share with others as I'm sure
he taught them to share when they were children. While he's
apologizing he should also include his childish behavior of the last
five years in not attending family functions with her. Bill
obviously sees his father as acting like a child because of his past
behavior so it is way past time for him to apologize for that
transgression as well.
While a lot of what I have written above is dripping with sarcasm I
stand by every word. The logic of the argument is very valid based
on the facts as you present them. You have portrayed Perley as a
spoiled child since he couldn't be civil to his ex-wife for the last
five years, what Bill says proves that. You've also portrayed
Perley as a hot-headed asshole because he didn't forgive her right
away since he feels the need to apologize now.
You could have got them back together without making Perley
apologize, but you did not. He could have been magnanimous and
accepted her abject apology and allowed them to get back together
slowly, but you did not. Instead you had him ask her out. You had
him accept the worst apology/explanation I've ever read as something
he needed to hear and to have it sooth his feelings over her
infidelity. And while he tries to tell her he doesn't know where
this is going it is more than obvious that he will remarry her, it
is only a matter of time. At that time he will probably apologize
to her again though he was innocent of all sin.
I truly feel you should have left this one alone. You've turned a
real honest to goodness man into a wimp husband, it just took longer
than usual, and I'm saddened by your choice.
Ray
Unfortunately, 1 More Concurrence Here
This post-script thought ruined a great story.
I'm all for reconciliation; because reconciliation --- if done for the right reasons --- is about people changing their selfish, narcissistic ways, to become better human beings. It is about, for example, FORGOING a few hours of seemingly out-of-this-world [false, illusional] fluid exchanged with strangers or known-ones/friends/collegues, so that the love, purity, and trust one has in his/her marriage/partner would stay unsoiled, WHETHER one thinks the partner is or is not likely to know [of such extra marital activities],,,
But this part, as SleeplessMD said, was one of those reconciliation-at-all-cost writings.
The real [first part] story was great, because it was a personal reflection about what infedility could cost a person, a whole family. The monotone was quite fitting; but NOT in this. In this, Sharon, Grace [the narrator], Perley, Bill, and all others talk in the same mono-tone.
If you're going to do this, you gotta take time to develope those other characters, make sure they have distinct tones, voices, ambivalences, are 3-d, what-not. (If not, don't do unnecessary sequels like this; they ruin good stories!)
I would still like to see some possible reconciliation --- even if not in re-marrying then in the two becoming friends again --- but not like this. The woman, Grace, buying a $600 plus dress just to impress Perley ----- this woman seems, now, to be quite shallow, materialistic, superficial, and impulsive, her forever declaration of love for Perley NOTWITHSTANDING.
Indeed, it WAS her shallowness --- just what she needs, what she looks like TO OTHERS [be it her husband or some strangers], etc. --- that ruined 25 years of a life Perley thought a good one.
"I always heard great things about great sex by my friends, most of whom are divorced, so I just wanted to try it, to see what's like,,,, but I didn't like it that much; I rather do it with you, just make sure you do those stuff he was doing to me, Perley,,,"
Tear Jerking
A very wonderful non-erotic story. My eyes watered with tears because of the sadness, yet hopefulness of two people really in love but were too stupid to realize it at a difficult time in their lives.
Normally I don't comment to other posters, but....
An anonymous poster gave this an 100 and said below:
"Very nicely done. From a female point of view, most men would not be this forgiving, even 5 years later. The macho factor would kick in."
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No direct offense intended, but I bet this was from a Woman. Because most men wouldn't feel this way.
Why do I say this? Most writers forget something when they write a story. Men and women look and think about life differently.
Often when men watch a movie, read a story, or really do anything in life they put themselves in the place of the main character in the story. They think to themselves "What or how would I do in that situation". Thats why you often seen "herds" of boys playing Jedi with broomsticks after watching Star Wars. Its a fact of life that men often transfer themselves into a story. Thats why most men are so passionate about what they like and dislike in a story. Men get a good "pump" from being excited in a story.
Often women on the other hand, watch things to see how bad life "could be" then are happy they "aren't" that person. That's why some womean can watch really sad movies, have a good cry, then go on. They feel sorry for the character in the movie or story, but they are uplifted because their life isn't that bad. But for men it depresses the heck out of them, because you never want to put yourself in the place of the main character that is so obviously screwed over. There is no pump in being sad and depressed.
But the main reason that I wanted to respond to that poster, who was Anon, was that I got a chuckle out of the "Macho" comment in the posting. And it made me feel that it was a slight jab at the male readers who felt let down by revisting what they thought was a good story.
Just because someone gets screwed over in a marriage and decides he wants out doesn't mean he has to reconcile with his ex-wife. He can still be "friends" or civil with her and not be her lover anymore. Not wanting to be hurt again doesn't make you Macho, but smart. Only someone looking at it from the female side could say, sure she mesed up (over the course of months) but she sorry now and if the male doesn't take her back then he's as bad as she was. She sleeps around, and if the husband doesn't forgive and forget, he's as bad as the wife who was having "Unprotected Sex" with a man she really hardly knew? And that makes the husband "just as bad"??
Thats pretty one dimentional thinking on "someone" part. And just possibly a "touch" of selfishness too.
>=)
To Err is human, to forgive devine
Celt:
Your story is great because it exemplifies the forgoing. It is a well told addition to your original story because of the following old saw: "Time heals all wounds." Thank You. Ronnie W.
Perley's a Loser Afterall
Why in the world would Perley have anything to do with her? He was very smart to avoid all contact with her. Why would he lose his mind and be civil to her now? It looks like he's just another one of these loser wimps. Only losers reconcile.
Time is a great healer.
Both of injuries and emotions.
Now we know that since they both love the other so much that they WILL get married again and begin a new, different marriage.
Hopefully, once a cheater always a cheater will never apply!
Good story!!
To Err Is Betrayal, To Forgive Is Stupid
What a dunce this husband is.
A spouse who cheats (man or woman) is a whore and a slut. The spouse who has stayed loyal is stupid to take the other back for they are only asking for another dose of shame, hurt and humiliatuins. It isn't rocket science: Cheaters are cheaters because they cheat and once they start cheeating, they never quit.If you can make love to a woman you married and kiss her lips afterv they have been wrappd around another man's cock, you are from a diffrent planet than I am. While not just hold her pussy open and help her lover put hus cock in her, you week-kneed pussy?
The Baron.
look every writer has his or her style
the men in the celt stories are very senitive and brainy,but no common sense.he rewards her for betrayal,with more spouse support than usual,gave her the house.i think the writer wrote him to under control.when you're mad you lash out to hurt and destory who cause you pain.thanks for using your talent and keep writing good stories.
Johnny Come Lately!!
Just read the story and the comments....
All I got to add is that these two are oldsters...demented and need companionship...[who doesn't]....and they would rather be with the devil they know then the devil they don't know...
What's humourous is the author actually having them stay celibate all that time...dumb...very dumb...in writing.
I would have them do normal social things ...even fucking others in the normal course...but both realizing that each other was still a better deal...and that is why they came together..
but that's me.
Andy
Good Tale
I'm surprised that I hadn't commented on this before, but better late than never. I enjoyed this, I thought it was very well done. Grace's adultery shattered their lives, but enough time had passed for the pain to have eased. In some cases love and time can overcome adversity, it's not like this can't happen. Perk did punish her - he divorced her and had NO contact with her for 5 years.
Time passed, passions cooled and with the help of their children they may be able to reunite. Why is this so difficult to understand? I just don't understand why some people delight in nurturing hate and resentment - it must make for a bitter life. Thanks celt for a well told, well thoughtout story.
bullshit
took a great story, turned the husband into a pussy wimp; she's still a cunt tramp but i guess he can't get any other companionship
he shouldn't gave you nothing,let your pimp pay
wimp ass writers,pay her for fucking his life up.let the guy she fuck pay for her living.it make no sense,divorce and pay for everything for her.she was a slut and whore for jason,let jason pay for her living.
Unsatisfying
Been a while since I first read "After the Affair" and this sequel. This time through I discovered some things that bothered me. First, I have to ask why Grace never asked Perley for forgiveness? She had the affair, it was wrong and she knew it was wrong. Without his forgiveness of her infidelty, I just can't see how they can reconcile.
Second, Grace's thinking that she couldn't figure out how to ask Perley to jazz up their sex life strains credibility. I mean, come on, she's gonna take on a lover because she's too embarrassed to ask her loving husband of 25 years for as much hot, nasty sex as she can get? It just doesn't ring true.
Third, I don't believe that "love conquers all." I had to suspend disbelief when the author wrote that neither had been in a relationship in the five years since the divorce. Given Grace's apparent curiosity about sex with other men, I would've thought she would be interested in dating and finding other partners but for some reason she isn't. It's weirdly incongruous. Why Perley isn't interested in other women remains a mystery since the author doesn't really explore this aspect of his character in either story.
The reconcilation itself is a bizarre as well. Grace and Perley meet once at their grandson's birthday party and kapow! They agree to a dinner date but, before they actually go out, they have a tremendous heart-to-heart which magically results in "alles ist gut". I realize that "time heals all wounds" but, sheesh, does it make you stupid as well? I could believe that over time, incidental (and perhaps not so incidental) contact might make them remember the good times in their marriage. It might make them wonder if the other person had changed or if they still had feelings for the other. That I could've believed but not the way the author penned it. Tossing them together and having them reconcile in one swell foop just isn't believable.
A fifty for this effort. Not bad, not good.
a good man
Usually, in a story like this I would say kick the bitch to the curb and don't look back. In this case, both characters evolved. I couldn't help but feel empathy for Grace. I found myself wishing the best for her and Perly.
spiderman
a good man
Usually, in a story like this I would say kick the bitch to the curb and don't look back. In this case, both characters evolved. I couldn't help but feel empathy for Grace. I found myself wishing the best for her and Perly.
spiderman
a weak man who runs away from pressure
if someone is having affair with my wife i want justice or revenge on that person.the writer make the husband weak and wimpy.
Unnecessary-- Ch.2
The ending to Ch. 1 involved Perk walking away from his wife and marriage of 25 years. He had viewed 3 tapes of his wife acting as a comman whore with a man 20 years his junior. All of the hurt, heartache, sense of betrayal and loss of their future together was powerfully portrayed by the author and should have been left there.*****Ch.2 is well written, as usual for this author, but should not have been written so that Ch. 1 could stand on its own as a testament to how the selfish and unthinking acts of adultry can condemn a good marriage to the trash heap.
counsler
she went to a counselor to find out why she had an affair with a young guy and after all that she and the counselor didn't know why she did it? ugh, she's a slut , celt, and sluts like to get their eyeballs fucked out. that will be $100 celt.
"I screwed up and I ruined my life" said she.
Other than self imposed nonsex exactly how did she ruin her life. She didnt need a job, she still had her family, her lifestyle except for not having to live with a roommate she could cheat on it didnt change at all. She didnt ruin her life, she ruined his life. She figured fucking around on your spouse is ok as long as you dont get caught. She really didnt confront issues like the other man bragging to people and ruining her and her husbands reputations. She didnt consider the possible physical abuse a lover could put her thru. She didnt consider diseases she could get from a man who screwed around and pass them on to her husband. She didnt consider time she spent with and involved with another was taken away from her marriage and her spouse. I agree with another critiquer, a year of counseling failed to really identify her reason for cheating because they were looking for an excuse or rationalization. The real reason she cheated was lack of morals or ethics and the brains of a common slut. She already considered herself a kept woman, prostitute, in that her husband provided all of her needs and she only had to provide him meals, comfort, and sex. Now the next step is to figure out why a man with that much money to provide a cheating adulterous spouse with all of her living expenses, would bother to go back to a woman of around 55 by now, and not recycle and possible find a woman with morals and ethics. Maybe this man is like the woman who has an abusive husband, divorces him, only to marry another abusive man or go back to the same abuser. In that case, we are talking about a man with mental problems here who can not be considered capable of making sane decisions. Been said before, will be again, stupid people do stupid things.
SHOULD HAVE KNOWN
Excellent story and ,as usual, well written. I was reading the comments and couldn't believe how many people still didn't want Perk to forgive her. Even after five years. Yes, she did have a nice house and a generous allowance but she was alone with her regrets. Do you know how punishing that is? The last time she saw the man she loved was when he was in terrible pain and she had to live with that image knowing she was the one that caused it. I did read one that I completely agreed with, however, and when I looked to see who wrote it, I thought, "I SHOULD HAVE KNOWN". Another one of my favorite authors, Blue88, that explains a lot. The good ones always seem to know a lot about human behavior and life. Again, THANK YOU FOR THE ENJOYMENT OHIO.
Couldn't Levave it alone....
... had to go and ruin it with a "Revisited" WIMP OUT ending. Sometimes you really make sick.
Do you really have to force reconciliations at any
cost? After five years they come back together, yeah right. So we will assume they have both been totally brain dead for five years and suddenly all is good and they have grown past the betrayal, infidelity, cheating, and adultry. Yeah right! She has been self flagellating for five years now, so suddenly she is ok, and a warm anf faithful wife. Nope dont buy it. You can forgive her actions as she was unethical, immoral, and immature and so wasnt really capable of being a faithful wife. You can over time get over the fact she totally betrayed you, cheated on you, and destroyed her marriage contract by willfully chosen actions. But trust her again, are you really that crazy? There are to many women out there that have been shit on by adulterous husbands that would make great wives to go back to one whom you know is incapable of true love and loyalty, much less trustworthy.
shit!
fuck, i didnt mean to give this a 5 bc it sucked big time!! That whore felt bad and stayed single for yrs waiting for perc to come back and after all that time they both realize it was silly little mistake and get back together? what the fuck was that shit!? It was a powerfull story until you had to gay it up and have perc become a little bitch. how the fuck can he ever trust her again? you write such interesting stories and then sometimes you fuck it up by having such stupid endings that make no sense. like the man said, sometimes you make me sick. im srry for harsh, but you gotta man up and write at least semi-believable endings!
Again – an incredible reconciliation
Again, I wish to urge any author if you wish to ‘do reconciliation’ by all means, do it! But please, could you work on it while still building the main plot and not let it seem like an afterthought?
Why dig this enormous hole to which you throw the divorced couple, a hole in the form of an extended cheating, aggravated and acrimonious separation, no recognized reason (to the end!) for the cheating, half a decade of no contact AND THEN as if with a magic wand they come together? The scenario you built is such a stretch to known experience that requesting the readers to further suspend disbelief with your narrative is indeed a mission impossible.
One additional point which I have not seen among the many arguments made in the same venue has to do with the motivation for the reconciliation. In fact, it is not true that ‘once a cheater always a cheater’. Many stay loyal but depending on the circumstances, one has to examine the value of each ‘reunion’. The fact that in this story neither had any relations in five years would count in my book AGAINST not for their reunion. It’s not like they truly tried relations with other people. For him – there is no reason that we know of, other than ‘he still loves her’. The ‘minor’ point: what exactly did he still love about her remained unclear in my mind. For her – the love factor does not make any sense. She knew she loved him all along. And guilt and shame are terrible reasons for getting together.
Overall sticking a Romance at the tail of a dark realistic tale of betrayal and divorce in the most aggravated of circumstances feels as congruent as mixing a chocolate cake with spicy salsa…
Time heals
I'm a grandad nine times over. I know time heals. A man does not love many others in his life, and he may come to value the intimate love and friendship more than the betrayal. She is repentant and has lived the act of Contrition. She has made it possible for him to forgive her; she is a very rare woman.
A friend who has shared your history and grown through life with you is rare. Life is short, especially at my age. Loves are few. Celebrate the joy you shared. Leave the rest. It ain't easy, but it is best for you children and grand children. I've done it.
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