Forsaking All Others

This story didn't fit together for me.

Dumb

needs a finsih, the notes, who placed them, etc. Not one of Grey Eagles better efforts.
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Hmm good story for most of it -

BUT

The tastes good part was never answered

The "he uses it well but her husband could teach him" says she knows more than she has acknowledged

It almost seems like parts of 2 stories - with one ending - the ending might be fine for one but not the other -

finish it?

The story just....stops.

Needs to be finished. explain the phone call. what happens to end story because sure sounds like she is cheating. who is leaving notes, if they exist at all.

don't expect

Don't expect Grey Eagle 286 to ever finish this.
12/07/11 was the last time this writer posted a story.
Many of "his" stories seem to be or are unfinished.

In Florida what Kelli and Dave did could qualify as kidnapping for purposes of prosecution.
But then too, Florida has alligators, crocodiles, sharks, swamps and sinkholes.
Decisions, decisions......

This looks like a candidate for a FTDS rewrite.

ok ive read 2 of your stories.

i wont be reading a third.

What's that sound?

I can't even BEGIN to tell you how much this story sucked. That roaring sound you hear....that's the sound of Black Holes being pulled in by the INCREDIBLE gravity generated by the suckiness of this story!

Of course she fucked Dave,

and after being unable to subdue her husband she and her black boy decided that in order to stay alive they needed to come up with a good story. Hubby really is a dumbass if he falls for that story. And I would kill Dave, cause he will get him later, after all he's fucking his wife and she said that he would fold up like Grandma's hide-a-bed. She's a lying cunt, but a pretty good actress. Which is it, does Dave have a big dick or is it smaller than hubby's? I guess it depends on which lie she's telling at the time and if she knows hubby is listening.

Story was pretty bad and hubby didn't have much going for him if he would forgive that. Her dominating him because she thought he was cheating? Where are the notes? Where are the panties she said she found? What the fuck was she doing at a party where the other sluts were fucking and sucking strippers? Does he need to get tested for diseases? Can he have her arrested and then divorce her while she's in jail?

glad it stopped writing

what is it with over 50 Americans and there love of cuckolding men in their stories?
so he hates her cheating and cuckolding him but he takes her back?
Islam will take over America because anyone not muslim is a pussy writer, fuck, no wonder USA is going to hell if all the old guy's get off on wives fucking other men.....grey eagle....thank you for no longer writing.....fag(feminist American guy) .

pure shit

1*

Really rubbish

Your writing has got worse, there is very little in this story to enjoy. 1 *

This was over-the-top reconcilliation

He really needs to kick her to the curb and divorce her. I'm sorry. She's talking but I didn't believe a word coming out of her mouth. I think she was lying thru her teeth. She never showed him any notes. And seeing Dave's cock at the party was just too much of a coincidence. She's cheating. He's just too blind to see it, even with the overwhelming evidence he has. What a dummy!

****

Wasn't it P.T. Barnum who said, "There's one born every minute"? Sucker! BTB! Cheers!

great

in content, and statements made. there is certainly an undercurrent going on. she never did explain the "you taste so good too". where are the 15 notes and panties?

Unfinished

Need to find out who was trying to break them up

Weak

You didn't explain her comments and you didn't finish the story

2nd read

still a great story. I agree with Parttime, who is trying to break them up? I'll take a quick guess, it was the friend that suggested the domination scene. It seems funny in a way that the wife didn't understand her husband enough to know what he would do, unless she actually believed her friend. it is a good story, and could be fleshed out a lot more.

He wrapped the broken chain around Kelleys throught

And with a quick jerk of the chain snapped Kelley neck like a twig. He smiled as he watch the life leave her eyes. Turning to the nigger he smiled the smile of the Grim Reaper and slowly walked towards the piece of black shit standing in his bedroom raising both chains for the final strike. The end

Sorry.....1

It started out real strong and petered out......It was incomplete.....bill

The bitch, whore, slut

She never did explain what Mike heard her saying on the phone did she ? Nah just like a whore avoiding the trueness of the phone call. as far as the story goes it was pretty good. I have read better stories from you though. 4 stars only because they don't have a three and a half stars.

Too Many Loose Ends

The identity of the 'other woman' is never revealed. My guess is Doris. But it is only a guess. She never really revealed what her telephone conversation had meant. She truly needs to explain her comment about Dave's cock 'tasting good'. A wife who vows she loves her husband does not drug him and have him restrained. That is not an act of love but of hate. Whipping him and having him beaten almost to unconsciousness is another act of hate. Bringing another man into the marital bed is yet another act of hate. Trying to force a submissive cuckold life upon him is the definitive act of hate toward him. Believing an anonymous entity over her husband and no longer trusting her husband proves there is nothing left in the marriage to go forward. Tens of thousands of marriages have ended for far less.

I am with Kerry 312 on this

As for his going back to her, fuck that. If she loved him so much something like this would be anathema to her. Chain him then whip him because she loves him, and he needs to give the male stripper lessons? I call BULLSHIT! He should go to the ER and when they ask do you feel safe at home answer hell no! Next his wife will try castrating him because she loves him. My only advice is RUN FOREST, RUUUUUN!

utter

rubbish. #1 TK

good story

I can relate to some of it. Where I used to work, there was a woman there that was attractive, and single. Almost all the other guys would hit on her, but she was always polite in her rejection. After the shift I asked her if she would like to join me and the rest of the crew for breakfast and a brew, she accepted. I told her I was married, and happily so, but felt she needed some shielding from all the attacks. So I would be her shield, and the other guys would leave her alone. Maybe it would help her get along with the guys rather than constantly being hit on. It worked for awhile, then my wife told me she was getting phone calls that I was cheating on her. I explained to her what was happening, and I thought she bought it, at least she said she did. No there wasn't any affair, but I did get a phone call about 2 in the morning, that there was a moving van in front of my house. After 2 months explaining, offering interviews with some of the guys, she came back. No good deed goes unpunished.

I never thought that I would go through that, but it happened. Some of my friends must have thought they were a better match, or wanted me out of the way.

tootight1 comment

Hate to tell you but a wife that moves out for two months thinking you cheated only moved back because she figured she had evened the score by having sex with someone at her work.
Especially since when she departed she was sure you cheated.
DO NOT GET UPSET WITH MESSENGER
HOWEVER, SHE GOT AWAY WITH IT THEN AND YOU TOOK HER BACK NO QUESTIONS ASKED, SO SHE CERTAINLY DID IT AGAIN.
EASIER FOR BECAUSE SHE HAS YOU ON DEFENSIVE.
Time to take off the blinders else you'll end up like big daddy ike in Winston Montana. Serial cheating wife who rubs his nose in it and stories going around town told by numerous people of seeing her going at it hot and heavy with guy in bar, seeing her car in motel parking lot, ex-lovers telling stories of blowjobs in baseball dugouts and Saturday morning sex romps in grass at public campground, blowjob one afternoon in Helena Montana coffee shop, under a highway overpass mid-morning of bright sunny Autumn day
Her name and contact on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com.

Too much ... !!!

This BTB story started off well but really turned sour when the "end" arrived. Chaining-up your husband and whipping him ..... hmmmm .... I think he was drugged too ...... then the ball gag, and a stripper to fuck ..... Sorry, but for my tastes, this was the wrong ending for the story.

Explain

Still didn't explain the "taste" or " cock loving " remarks.

SEEING IS BELIEVING

and hearing is fantasy. TK U MLJ LV NV

Fucking bitch is stone crazy.

I still don't know what the hell is going on, and really I don't care.

Fucking notes, whips, chains, beating him. Yeah, how could she not love him!

hmm

OK, this needed another chapter as it left alot open.
The way you wrote it, she did cheat.
You didnt explain any of the things making her think he cheated.
Nor who this person was that told her to do that to him.

And a stripper that punched him and does felonies for her?
Nope he was her lover.
Only an absolute idiot would keep her or believe that story she gave.

Writing is good, but need more to explain and fix the story line.

Gawd! What a Wimp!

Leave and DIVORCE her already. Anyone that goes to those extremes, deserves to be forgotten and left behind...