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Good luck...
... in the contest. I was probably confused because I didn't understand the background of the story. Happy holidays,
always, E
a contest about a contest....
my head is swimming....good luck!
a contest about a contest....
my head is swimming....good luck!
Hmmm okay ...
You really need to bottle that stuff and send it to the White House and Capitol Hill. The ensuing hijinks would be worth watching. Good luck!
Cookie :)
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i do have a problem with this story, although i liked the premise... where's the actual sex? and i do kinda feel like the whole christmas thing was tossed in rather than being an integral part of the story. maybe i'm just being picky, but since it's part of the contest i think i was expecting a little more =/
Clever and Original
This could turn into an interesting series. My quibble was with there being so much TELL with so little SHOW, and there being so much technical backstory. Still, it was original and clever. Hope you keep refining the idea.
Rumple
Spike my Coke, Scorpio!
Other than the scientific stuff flying over my head and the fact that the story seems to have nothing to do with Christmas except the actual word "Christmas" near the end (sorry but I had to say it), the plot was very smart and potentially wicked. Good luck in the contest.
LOL
Not as good a story as you usually write, but anything that makes me laugh out loud has merit in it's own right. Four stars.
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