A Second Chance

Good story.

We all need a second chance - just remember that when it comes - don't mess it up!!

there is someone there above all............

there is someone there above all............The Almighty........

dbdf

What a great story, brought tears of joy!

great

I liked the play of emotions

Great finish -

Nice work - it wound well - a bit predictable of course - we all knew she had a significant past - but you did a great job with it.

You made the central point well and finished BIG very creative

Few stories on this site are really believable.

This one was just ridiculous.

So why did my eyes mist up? And why did I finish with a warm feeling of satisfaction?

Beats me.

just tears

this story really brought tears to my eyes

Too often, young men are lauded for their sexual conquests and called 'studs', whilst young women are condemned as 'sluts'. It's good that he recognised the hypocrisy implicit in that double standard, and acted upon it.

Good writing

but you did lay it on a bit thick. I may have to get tested for diabetes after reading this.

Clever interweaving of themes

You touched on so many themes in this story. First, losing the first marriage because of getting a little on the side. Then, the scared kids in college going all out to have sex with everybody because they see 'popularity' as an antidote for their insecurity. Then, finding his true love, the only woman in the universe for him. Then the destructive nature of secrets, and the total power that the person who knows the truth holds over another. Then the stupidity that a person displays by deciding that the laws of physics don't apply to him just because he has a reason to drive fast. Then there's the power of pure love, coupled with the power of prayer. Then comes the importance of forgiveness, and the purifying power of giving a person (two in this case, Sally and Leah) a second chance. And finally the redeeming quality of giving birth to innocent babies.

That's a lot to cram into what, 7000 words? Yet you did it, and you made every one of your points quite well. So if people want to treat this like a walk in the park, I think they haven't been paying attention to what they were reading. Don't listen to 'em! Keep up the good work!

I am not really religious BUT...

I do believe in God and pray (not enough). I caught a tear with this story and I guess that I am not quite as cynical as I used to be. Thank you, DG.

Am I the only one?

Did anyone chuckle that the babies were named Mary and Joseph?

I think I have used this phrase before, "Exceptional Story"

This one is a real emotion filled story.

Didn't Need The Religion Angel

The story would have been just as meaningful without the "divine intervention."

Fiver

Nice love story thanks.

Absollutely Outstanding

Thank you, DG. This one has got to be one of the most beautiful, most well written stories I've ever read, and even now, I'm sitting here in shock and awe, with tears raining down this old man's face. God Bless you, DG; and I hope to read more just like it. peace and God's blessing to you, my friend.
God's Speed to you,
MoogPlayer

I am in tears

I've pretty much seen how man can be in all his/her forms. I saw a father that got drunk on Christmas eve and stabbed his son over a crab cake, I've seen people go blow themselves up for their dream of 72 black eyed virgins. I've seen a teenager run into a burning building and could only save one of two children and I saw his aftermath. I've seen women and men cheat on their significant others even to the point of abusing them, men and women. I saw a frail 80 year old man rip open a door off a crashed car to save two babies while the car was on fire only to pass away from the burns after he made sure the children were safe. I saw a single mother who went nuts and put her own baby into a hot oven "because G-D told her to like abrahamtried to sacrafice Isaac. And I myself was in a car accident where I went face first into the windsheild of a 75 Buick sedan that was doing over 45mph. I was told that I died and that only the heroic efforts of the driver who hit me doing cpr saved me, or did he? I remember being above the scene and seeing all the drama played out. I felt myself pulled away only to see my grandmother in a field that I had never been to but later found. It happened to be a field where she grew up and she held me tight and explained how it wasn't my time yet. She then led me back and showed me myself on the roadway with the paramedics coming to work on me with the driver still doing CPR on me. I saw and heard my parent's crying next to my body while the driver prayed for me. I asked my Grandmother why I couldn't stay with her as I missed her terribly. Once again she told me it wasn't my time yet. Then she promissed to keep an eye on me and that she would always be close. I felt pulled back into my body as the medics continued to work on me but still felt I was a lost cause. When I woke up I was crying ( I was all of 13 at the time). I could still make out my Grandmother next to my parents when she turned to me and kissed my forehead, I could no longer hear her though. She faded away and I cried again. When I told everyone what I experienced they all put it down to just my brain making things up, that is until I described the field. My father went white as a ghost and explained that it was near to where my Grandmother (RIP) was raised and where my father lived near for most of his childhood. He never mentioned the place nor did he ever show me the pictures of it. I told him something that only my Grandmother and he knew about. I also spent three weeks in the hospital and then three months recovering. I got my second chance so I can empathise with the main character. According to the medics I was legally dead, they did not think I would make it to the hospital and they felt it was also a miracle. As to what G-D has planned for me I still do not know, but I do believe that I will see my Grandmother and now my mother again. I pray that I am making them proud and that I am fulfilling whatever it is that caused it to not be my time yet. I have often asked why was I sent back instead of some others that I've known personally and who I thought were better than me and deserved to live. Why was I so different? When I stand up in front of our G-D I will try to ask.
People say a leopard can't change it's spots but I think differently. They just have to want to do it enough and they can. At the time of my accident I was a young kid of 13 and started getting into trouble. After that I always ask myself would this make my Grandmother think less of me and if so I would stop and do something else. Cheaters can change, however I am one of the BTB crowd. Just because they can does not mean that the offended party should not seek retribution against the offender. Nor does it mean that they should be forgiven and allowed to return to the one that they offended. It just means that if they get a second chance (say with a new spouse) they should endevor to not repeat themselves. Yes they can and should change just with someone else.


In this story the girlfriend had changed, his sister though maybe not so much. It was never explained why she was so scared her husband would find out was she still up to her whole hijinx or had she changed? Did she do those things while she was with him, was she still doing them? If so then she hasn't changed. She may be embarrassed about her past but, that doesn't mean it is the end of the world. At worst she can tell her husband that she was like thst then but has changed for the better and she was ashamed and afraid he would reject her.
now if she cheated on him then he has cause to leave or seek out whatever means of redress he desires and can pull off.

Okay I'm getting off my soap box now.. Gave it a five* rating...
seeker

Another tear jerker

I agree women can sleep around just as men do. But once you commit to each other that life is over. As far as God is concerned , miracles happen but I do not believe that God had anything to do with it. People used to believe the sun was good or some stupid statute. Now we made God becauce we needed to ground people from all kinds of beliefs. That my theory. Millions have died over there godly beliefs. Nice story from DG Hear. He usually ends them like this.

belief

no one really knows what happens at time like that. for you none belivers you have never been in a fox hole or had a ship shot out from under you. i haven't either but have freinds that have, so yes there is a higher power watching over them. my late wife was dead on the table twice but came back . for you butt holes to chicken and or sorry to put up your name fall in a hole & pull the dirt over you !!!!!!!!!!!

There is no god

God botherers!

To Anonymous 11/11/15

You left the same comment on one of my stories that you did on this one, and while I don't know who you are, I'm still going to pray for your soul...God bless you!

MoogPlayer

thoughtful questions

ones each reader will have to answer for themselves.
rather than weigh in on the philosophical issues I will just say that it was a well crafted story, told well, with lots of room for personal reflection.

To MoogPlayer and Anonymous 11/11/15

As you can probably tell from my user name, I'm unlikely to attend a Mass any time soon, but unlike some other atheists, I have no problem reading stories with a religious bent to them... If the story is well written, which in this case is true.

After all, I thoroughly enjoy almost all of JimBob44's works and he definitely leans very heavily towards Catholicism (and in some cases anti atheism). I have even allowed a certain amount of religion into my own work (see The River) as even though I'm an atheist, my characters don't necessarily have to be.

From a personal standpoint, I did find the God stuff ladled on a bit thickly, but then it was the nature of the story, so I am willing to offer some latitude here. And to be honest, it didn't really detract from what was a highly enjoyable tale.

Good Story

Yes, there is God! There is a lot to be said about it, but , unfortunately, this is not the forum for it.

i BELIEVE THERE IS SUCH A THING AS DIVINE INTERVENTION

all too often you hear of miracles happening that have no explanation....but deary me what a real slut she was and his sister....who has kept it a secret from her man....god help her if he finds out.....just one thing that made this a piss take was naming the twins...Joseph and Mary.....that is taking it too far....

Thanks

I also believe in a higher power. I call that higher power, God. I believe He gives us all a second chance.

A FANTASTIC STORY!

Hi there peoples! Truly I snickered at the Babies names! I for one believe in God! If you don't believe you may never experience the love of God! The story is sweet and sentimental! I love romance stories and there is that! Thanks for sharing this with us. Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.