by SavgeWolf
Great sketch.
I like this line: winking in and out
Good poem and drawing, but I wish there were a few less ellipses.
Sketches…afternoon
Somewhere along the way…
I lost myself in her
woken from a reverie…
realizing I exist no more
breathing only through her
feeling only through her
knowing only through her
Sketches…afternoon
Somewhere along the way…
I lost myself in her
woken from a reverie…
realizing I exist no more
breathing, feeling, knowing
only through her. - Maybe?
I think there were too many "her" words in the poem, and you could've done without them. The ellipses didn't seem to bother me much but I'd try to go for the right punctuation. The poem has great potentional and I enjoyed. There's only a few things I would work on. Thanks for sharing! Beautiful picture!
Very nicely done
Perhaps a bit too heavy on the hers;
Keep it light and subdued
In the style of that excellent illustration.
the same savagewolf I know?? I enjoyed the poem and found the sketch to be a great picture as well as an addition to the poem.
Once her sexual wares have been discovered ~ sexual addiction sets in ~ I have lost myself in her. Illustration certainly bears out the meaning of this rendering.