The Homeless Man

Childish &

Plain STUPID...

Really funny

You are really funny

Drunk?

There's NO way they were so drunk that they slid from dancing to UNKNOWINGLY fucking!

Sometimes I have to read what the author wrote very carefully -

Not what I think he meant or what I think the characters really think - but what the author decided they thought and meant.

The author wrote how she felt and reacted - she really thought she was making lpove to her husband - bizarre? OK - weird? OK - Possible? I guess - but whatever it IS what happened because the author said so.

SO - she fucked up and did what she could to make amends in absentia - good effort on her part even if too late. The brother he is not nearly so innocent having harbored the lust for her for so long and not dealt with it better then to have taken her.

What about hubby - he is completely psychotic right now and needs help - a lot of help - win lose or draw as far as his marriage goes - there is a lot more story here that would be interesting.

It is a fascinating construct if we accept what the author wrote and we really do not have much of an option to do otherwise and still call it his story??!!

So finishing such a start would be good -

what an stupid ending

you had such a good story going and then you ruin it with such a stupid ending

Yeah...

...fine stor

ending

he saw the truth she refused to admit

new ending

The story wasn't bad but that ending has got to go.
Wheres the healing ,even if he never takes her back this needs an end that better suits the story.

All through the story I was on the fence.

On one hand I liked that he was so in love that her betrayal completely destroyed him. On the other hand a man should have more character than that. Then came the end and completely ruined the entire story.

I'm really surprised, Grey Eagle, who I normally like, would write such a bullshit ending. Sorry, but 1 star is what this deserves and I wish I could give it a negative rating. Shame on you.

At Last

At last, we are presented with a man of character and substance. He saw the facts (adultery,) and the players. Even though he became unhinged, and returned from the brink, he stayed faithful ,to his love, but also to his betrayal, and acted accordingly appropriately.

Finally A Story Of Truth

This is a true presentation of the easy destruction of a marriage. A husband and wife must work hard in one accord to nuture their marriage. They think it is indestructible. But it is not. It is, in fact, a fragile thing. And all it takes is one lie, or one indiscretion, one cutting remark, one misjudgment, one silly mistake and the marriage can explode like a hand grenade. The damage done to the spouse is long lasting and often irreparable. The ending, although surprising, was the correct one.

Really guys?

You guys feel this relationship is worth trashing. Really?

If this relationship ended this easily, then the both of them needed to grow up anyway. Marriage is about a history of choices. If one bad choice outweighs all of the good ones, then your relationship is doomed from the jump.

I'm so glad I have my wife who works things out instead of running at the first sign if trouble.

Javmor you should not comment !

After your latest little shitty caveat about comments on your story, why the hell you feel the need to tell others how they can and cannot interpret a story they just read ? Your arrogance knows no bounds !
5*'s
Cpprcrk

Give Me a Break!

Marriage as-well-as family ties is based on love and trust. Trust that the ones you love won't screw you over or stab you in the back wether sober or drunk. If drunk, then there were hidden feeling that surfaced because of being drunk. Thus, the back stabbing couple deserve what they get.

Out of the norm

I usually don't write negative comments but, this story either the ideas were in short supply or the writer just didn't care to try and think up a better ending. The setup at the beginning of the story gave some promise that this was going to be a whole complete story, the short sighted ending was too easy and a waste of time. I'll never get that time wasted reading this story back, free or not.

ouch

I am shocked a the comments jav made.
Truely? In real life a guy would be hard pressed to get over being betrayed by the 2 he loved most in the world.

The story stopped to soon to tell if the marriage could be healed.
The husband would need treatment for a long long time.
However no judge would grant a divorce in this case either until he was treated given what they would have diagnoses at admission to hospital.

The real story would be about the journey to divorce or reconcile with the wife.
I doubt he could ever want to see his brother again.

This author writes very well, but tends to stop to many stories to soon.

Jav is an idiot

Glad you have the perfect mate Jav, nobody here believes or gives a fuck what or how you deal with shit..... You act and sound like a closet cuck queer so my guess is you are just fooling yourself wimp.....

BS ending. What she did would never happened in the Hospital. Those two cheated period.

Ever drive by a soup kitchen?

This is a funny story. Admit it. At least once when driving by a homeless shelter or soup kitchen you saw a homeless bum and thought, "he must be an idiot to live like this". If Jonathon was the guy you saw, you were absolutely correct. Jonathon is an idiot!

Dr semblance

I would say that a guy who calls another guy an idiot for disagreeing with him is the real idiot. Just saying.

And like you said, you have no idea what I would put up with. You know just as much about me as I know about you. The only difference is I don't judge people by what they say on the internet. If I did that then I would have to believe that you are a real doctor.

Unfinished

Abrupt 'ending', felt very rushed, it is really not much of a story without being fleshed out and with a proper ending rather than cutting out mid-paragraph.

What the ...?

This was going very nicely, until the last 6 paragraphs. Did they come from another story, incorporated by accident? Was there a deadline? Did you just get bored? If you're still out there, please finish this properly: don't just leave these poor characters like this. You got them into this situation, now get them out of it!