Hell, I thought it was hot ! People coming to this site and constantly complaining of grammatical errors makes me wonder if this is a story site or a punctuation witch hunt. Keep up the good work and can't wait fot part two.
Great story! The story is easy to read and the few grammatical errors aren't distracting at all. It is written from a point of view that allows the reader to be immediately submersed in the story.
Thanks for writing!
and regardless of what "anon" said, it was not as bad as many we read on here. And maybe "Anon" can help me here with my grammar. He made a comment about "but all the grammar errors", well sorry, but I thought he should have said "but all the grammatical errors", ):
Keep writing as your story had a nice flow to it, and as we are supposedly commenting on your story, and not your grammar, I will just say the story was good.
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Anonymous11/29/05
Wow
This was hands-down one of the best stories i've read on this site. And i've been a frequent visitor ot literotica.com for at least 4 years. congratulations - it had a great build-up, transition into the action, nothing was completely random, like girls being wet at the drop of a hat, the kink, the descriptions, it was all great. This story finally pushed me to become a literotica.com member and start sharing some of my own kinks - which we seem to have in common (this is the 1st fisting story i've come across)
Keep up the good work!
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Anonymous11/29/05
Fucking hot
Made the mistake of reading this one at work. Had to go to the head to jerk off after I finished because of the roaring hard on it gave me. Great job!!!
Lovrd it all from fisting to anal, nice touch with the exchange of cum!
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Anonymous11/30/05
Damn hot, damn good
Reading some of the comments... I guess you made a few grammatical errors. I usually notice those but because the story was so hot I didn't. Excellent job... one of the best stories I've read here. The people that don't like the more kinky stuff should try it... they might like it.
I thought your sex writing was extremely hot. Yes, it's a stroke story, so what? A damn good one like this is always worth the read. I didn't notice the MINOR mistakes until later...such is the effectiveness of your writing.
I don't usually read incest stories, for some reason I clicked on this one. It was well written and good...if I didn't have to go clean my apartment I'd see what else was up to read, lol. Will do so when I return to Lit...off to ride herd on my weekend wildboys, lol.
Was good, curious to see what else is up for offer...
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Anonymous12/07/05
Great stroke story but....
He should have shot his load inside his sister's pussy.
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Anonymous12/12/05
So how did she come again and again
I didn't understand how Molly's friend got to cum twice more while wearing the cock. Otherwise it was very hot. I guess fucking your sister in the ass is not really incest.
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Anonymous02/14/06
Good Stuff
I guess I noticed a few errors, but otherwise it was really good. Where's your other stuff? No other stories? No sequel?! Come on! Encore! Encore!
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Anonymous05/08/07
It was well written--It was good up till the point
where he got into the shit hole play---Why do you guys do that---If you love crap so much do it in the ANAL catagory---That is what it is for
I was so caught up in the story that I did not see the errors. Keep it up, you have talent.
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Anonymous12/06/12
Not much happens
There's no feeling at all between these horny kids. They're just after the sensations, and so it's a turnoff for me. Not even any dialog while they're fucking or whatever it is they're going. Would have been nice to have the sister's cunt filled and overflowing with his cum. The ass part adds nothing, Put this story somewhere else.
Didi In Chicago
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Anonymous03/12/13
just plain bad
poor writing poor editing no background no plot rushed sex no end questionable incest. all in all a total waste of time please delete and never post again.
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Anonymous07/15/13
sex, Sex, SEX ! ! !
that is what the three teens wanted, and got.. I guess the next chapter is when the brother fucks his sisters hot cunt, while Steph uses the strat on up his butt hole. Very exciting and entertaining; Thank You.
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Anonymous12/30/15
Keep going! More! More!
Just like Molly, I want more! I wish there was more of this story to enjoy. It turned me on so so much. Thank you!
English
Please find an editor
You've got a very good story and dialogue here, but all the grammar errors and awkward sentences detract from it.
Great
Hell, I thought it was hot ! People coming to this site and constantly complaining of grammatical errors makes me wonder if this is a story site or a punctuation witch hunt. Keep up the good work and can't wait fot part two.
grammer witch hunt
Great story! The story is easy to read and the few grammatical errors aren't distracting at all. It is written from a point of view that allows the reader to be immediately submersed in the story.
Thanks for writing!
Pretty good story
and regardless of what "anon" said, it was not as bad as many we read on here. And maybe "Anon" can help me here with my grammar. He made a comment about "but all the grammar errors", well sorry, but I thought he should have said "but all the grammatical errors", ):
Keep writing as your story had a nice flow to it, and as we are supposedly commenting on your story, and not your grammar, I will just say the story was good.
Wow
This was hands-down one of the best stories i've read on this site. And i've been a frequent visitor ot literotica.com for at least 4 years. congratulations - it had a great build-up, transition into the action, nothing was completely random, like girls being wet at the drop of a hat, the kink, the descriptions, it was all great. This story finally pushed me to become a literotica.com member and start sharing some of my own kinks - which we seem to have in common (this is the 1st fisting story i've come across)
Keep up the good work!
Fucking hot
Made the mistake of reading this one at work. Had to go to the head to jerk off after I finished because of the roaring hard on it gave me. Great job!!!
I am totally freaked out by the fact that so many
guys can get hot by thinking of a girl getting her smelly shit hole spit open by a cock. Real or artificial.
I can't imagine a worse thing happening to me
I guess that they have a cruel streak running thru them.
It's not only guys
that can get turned on by anal sex, so don't knock it until you try it. Hot story Kink, very impressive. For a stroke story you did wonders. A+.
Different folks
need different strokes. Hehehe.
I shudder at the thought of fisting, but I don't think it's a reason to downvote the story. You did a good job in writing smut.
If you don't like a specific act, you can always stop reading. Right?
Good luck.
Black Tulip
Great Story, so Hot
Lovrd it all from fisting to anal, nice touch with the exchange of cum!
Damn hot, damn good
Reading some of the comments... I guess you made a few grammatical errors. I usually notice those but because the story was so hot I didn't. Excellent job... one of the best stories I've read here. The people that don't like the more kinky stuff should try it... they might like it.
Simply great......
I thought your sex writing was extremely hot. Yes, it's a stroke story, so what? A damn good one like this is always worth the read. I didn't notice the MINOR mistakes until later...such is the effectiveness of your writing.
Wow Oh! Wow!!!!
Well done! Very well written and executed in general, especially for a HOT 'stroke story'. Great. More please!!
Thank you!
DAYYMMNN!!!
Hot! hot! and very well written. Enjoyable!!! Thanks.
A Holiday Family Treat, so to speak
Kink, I have but one complaint. It was way too short.
Rumple
Yow!
I usually shy away from this genre, but your story got me more than a little excited. Very hot and wet story. Good luck in the contest.
That cliche...strokes...folks???
I don't usually read incest stories, for some reason I clicked on this one. It was well written and good...if I didn't have to go clean my apartment I'd see what else was up to read, lol. Will do so when I return to Lit...off to ride herd on my weekend wildboys, lol.
Was good, curious to see what else is up for offer...
Great stroke story but....
He should have shot his load inside his sister's pussy.
So how did she come again and again
I didn't understand how Molly's friend got to cum twice more while wearing the cock. Otherwise it was very hot. I guess fucking your sister in the ass is not really incest.
Good Stuff
I guess I noticed a few errors, but otherwise it was really good. Where's your other stuff? No other stories? No sequel?! Come on! Encore! Encore!
It was well written--It was good up till the point
where he got into the shit hole play---Why do you guys do that---If you love crap so much do it in the ANAL catagory---That is what it is for
Hot...but
Probably not in the right category. Anal might indeed be more suited for this tale.
I thought it was great.
I was so caught up in the story that I did not see the errors. Keep it up, you have talent.
Not much happens
There's no feeling at all between these horny kids. They're just after the sensations, and so it's a turnoff for me. Not even any dialog while they're fucking or whatever it is they're going. Would have been nice to have the sister's cunt filled and overflowing with his cum. The ass part adds nothing, Put this story somewhere else.
Didi In Chicago
just plain bad
poor writing poor editing no background no plot rushed sex no end questionable incest. all in all a total waste of time please delete and never post again.
sex, Sex, SEX ! ! !
that is what the three teens wanted, and got.. I guess the next chapter is when the brother fucks his sisters hot cunt, while Steph uses the strat on up his butt hole. Very exciting and entertaining; Thank You.
Keep going! More! More!
Just like Molly, I want more! I wish there was more of this story to enjoy. It turned me on so so much. Thank you!
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