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by don8765412/04/05

A good start

I want to see more chapters of this one. Maybe she will forget to put her thingy in again? She sounds like a hot one and may make a wonderful mommy for your babies.

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by Anonymous12/05/05

um

learn to spell...please. Also, grammar and punctuation in this piece of crap was horrible.

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by Anonymous03/09/13

A little effort would have helped

The story started with the idea of a concept. It then ran into the land of repeats, although nothing necessarily wrong with that as it could be used as a ruse for the following action. Instead you allowed yourself to rush the ending into a few sentences. Unfortunately as you hadn't built any drama the end was obvious from your first sentence. I hope that any further chapters are improvements as this could have been better with even a touch of effort.

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