All Comments on ''05 Yesterday'

your short lines do a good job at conveying the tension, the fast pace. you might consider putting a hint at what the "dream" is, what makes this experience yours, the one you had, the one that could be no other to make the poem you wrote that no one else could have written.

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Short, hard, punchy lines

Make the feeling of the nightmare

Too real.

A perfect description of a nightmare or the lesser form known as 'a bad dream.' Stark and vivid!

I wonder really if these words aren't, as with other works by Midnight, therapy and an outpouring of the soul. Either way, the words are profound and can't help but produce an empathetic reaction in the reader.

To emerge out of the tunnel, pretending you've not only seen the light but emerged into the light of a better life, is a long way towards believing life is/will get better.

It would be lovely to see Midnight write in this more positive vein helping the subconscious repair and develop a 'way forward'.

remember your past and find an entry. TK U MLJ LV NV