Yet it needn't be, when sad thoughts wrap you tight, close your eyes and with all your might, think of friends who read your words in still of night, mayhap this will still your gloom, and in your mind the flowers of love will bloom. Thank You. Ronnie W
because you have voting and public comments open, i will comment on your writing, but only a little. i'd limit the use of the word 'suddenly', each time it is used it loses impact. and i'd also limit the use of the word 'so'. otherwise, this is an interesting poem and the rhyme seems to work (in my opinion).
Is that your anthem
In the last line,
"Words of pain and rarely delight?"
Perhaps not ~ I do recall
A few more positive writes...
shade for a few nice write (~_*)
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