All Comments on 'Standing Alone'

by RedHairedandFriendly

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Sad day, sad thoughts,

Yet it needn't be, when sad thoughts wrap you tight, close your eyes and with all your might, think of friends who read your words in still of night, mayhap this will still your gloom, and in your mind the flowers of love will bloom. Thank You. Ronnie W

wildsweetonewildsweetoneover 18 years ago
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because you have voting and public comments open, i will comment on your writing, but only a little. i'd limit the use of the word 'suddenly', each time it is used it loses impact. and i'd also limit the use of the word 'so'. otherwise, this is an interesting poem and the rhyme seems to work (in my opinion).

wso

LeBrozLeBrozover 18 years ago
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Is that your anthem

In the last line,

"Words of pain and rarely delight?"

Perhaps not ~ I do recall

A few more positive writes...

My Erotic TaleMy Erotic Taleover 18 years ago
a lone oak in a field

shade for a few <grin> nice write (~_*)

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