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the repetition...
of twigs, pine, and straw is probably the highlight of the poem, but basically, the poem sounds like poetry you'd find written in high school English class. Is that good or bad? You simply need to advance past this stage of writing. In some of your work, you have. I'm leaving the thermometer at 50% which is a 3--and a 3, like this poem, is average. And average, in my opinion, means the poem isn't bad, but it could be improved.
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what a special moment in time to watch two baby birds leave the nest. :)
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Nice write. Can see the chick leaving the nest, growing, and finally bulding its own; starting the cycle all over again.
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