All Comments on 'Taming The Slut'

Re-read this a few times. Read some other submissions, read more stories. Your short choppy sentences with interesting phrases "worship team", made this so hard to read I could not tell if there was a story plot.

she fell deeper in love with Andy after her torture night?! ;) Andy's alter ego speaking back the exact things he liked to hear?!;) or she had completely lost it?! ;)

I see that this is your first story here, so, take this as constructive criticism. Your writing tends to be pretty staccato. A few of your paragraphs are fairly-well thought out. But, many of them are pieced together with very short--verging on incomplete--sentences. There are also places where punctuation is either lacking, or confusing. Take a few deep breaths, and slow down, when you write. You could be really good.

Michael