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Good Set-up and Story
A slightly-different-from-the-normal scenerio and some nice build up to the action. You do a nice job of creating images. I hope there'll be more to the story.
Great Plot Twist
Well written with an unexpected, but perfectly logical in progression, plot twist. Very believable fiction. Also Very erotically stimulating.
Thanks for the feedback
Thanks for the positive feedback, I appreciate you taking the time to respond here, in emails and by voting.
Regarding voting... if you liked the story please remember to vote.
If you don't like the story, please take a moment to tell me what it is lacking. My score is pretty low so far and since I gauge reader appreciation by the score I'd like to know what's missing?
Be honest, but gentle!
Thanks!
Happy Holidays!
JG
If you want honest feedback,
you write a good tale but you put more into the background of your characters than you do the sex act itself. For this to really make it in the cat you have it in, you need to emphasize the sex more, put more details, feelings, sensations then just cut and dry fucking. I hope that helps.
Good Set-up, now for the rest of the story
OK, he's still a cop, and she still needs a story...
Part 2, please.
liked your story
that was a great story. i hate to say it but
i do work at wal-mart and i loved the line about
how well they pay!!
Great Hot little story! I loved it!
Great job! You certainly excited me!
Great Hot little story! I loved it!
Great job! You certainly excited me!
A most beautiful
and very original tale. Thank you.
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