I've been on Literotica for a VERY log time and read many fine stories. This story was definitely in the top 3. Good writing....No, great writing!
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Anonymous10/03/10
just follow the germs
These boring clowns don't realize that the victims of their criminal assault (you'd get 5-10 or more in most county courts, more from the Feds) could be the start of a small epidemic among Jim and Karen's innocent friends; and then branch out in many different directions.
That's what it is: assault. Not an amusing payback, but assault. I know Literoticaland isn't the Real World; but to write this completely non-erotic junk as it were af example of good, clean, morally OK behaviour is sick.
You know as much about syphilis as you know about the epidemiology STDs. Marie Jalla, Los Angeles
This is the second time I have read this story and it never gets old. It is a great story and I laugh every time when Jim and Rachel get their 'come - uppins'. I really enjoy your stories and hope you continue to write often. Keep up the good work!
This is the third time I have read this story and I still find myself having a good laugh especially at the end. I wish this story was around when my first wife run off with my best mate, it could have been useful.
Just keep up the great work, and don't let the lead in your pencil run out.
Almost evry story which were writen by DG Hear is EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous06/24/11
Nice
I really liked this story of yours. I like stories that are harder and not about all the forgiveness b.s. that many write about. Great job on this one!!!
by
Anonymous07/14/11
Amazing story
I always have a soft spot for revenge story. To me a person who live in this world and be nice, but when someone screw them over it time to show them how much they can lose. I also like the fact that this man Kevin did not take it too far because he did not hurt Carrie for his revenge and in the end found love.
And I also love happy endings. The syphilis was a great touch.
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Anonymous02/12/12
Really Great
Great, all three chapters. Five, five and.......4!
Four because - the last scene with her removing her pants and sticking his dick in her....not, just dropped the calibre flow of the story and characters. Aside from that, loved it!
That was awesome - I dislike the idea of revenge running someones life - but this story rocked -
A bit of a reality gap maybe on the trap but who cares - Jim and Rachel got what they earned and then some - nicely done-
Nicely written as well -
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Anonymous06/19/12
Hmmm
Very difficult to believe an officer of the court condoning the intentional infection of someone with an STD. But that was only one of many silly things that in no way really made this story any less entertaining. Thanks for writing.
The cheaters got what was coming to them. Kevin got over his evil ways and he and Carlie have a happy ending. I love it when the cheaters lose big in the end. Fuck 'em.
I read this again (at least the last chapter) every time I run across it.
Very apt revenge although it would have been nice to break a few bones in Jim's face (or had it done). I guess it turned out very well, served the bad couple well, especially the syphilis. Good touch!
Extremely well written and entertaining story of revenge You could've had him become an overnight multimillionaire with a business going thru the roof. However it was great. Thank you.
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Anonymous02/16/14
The "sting" was lame, but the story itself was enjoyable. So 4/5 stars from me.
Think of all the lives that might have been saved! "Jim didn't have a chance to take a shower, so the the disease set in". Really? That simple? You can just wash off a life threatening disease? If only people that become infected with disease would wash, the dirty buggers might live? Talk about lazy, they would rather die than go to the bother of washing!
Also, throughout the 3 chapters, you referred to Kevin as 'a hard nosed son of a bitch, with a chip on his shoulder', yet failed miserably to actually demonstrate or show it. So he divorced his cheating wife. Not evil - necessary. He had sex with a married woman that threw herself to him. Again, not evil - he WAS divorced, or in the process, so not in a relationship. Karen was the one doing the cheating on her husband, not Kevin. I don't think Kevin and Bob were dating each other, so Kevin was a free agent. What else, he fell in love, and helped Carlie get revenge and a divorce, for her sake. Yeah, he was SO mean and nasty, wasn't he?
Enjoyed the story though. Just a bit of fun.
This one was no exception. The writing style in this one, however, seemed a bit off. Some of the dialogue just didn't "sound" right, considering the above average smarts these characters had. Additionally, there was too much passive voice for my taste. (It was like scraping fingernails on a chalkboard.) I was confused about jobs. Did Jim, Rachel, and Carlie all work for the same company?
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Anonymous08/16/14
a lot of class
Unfortunately the final stunt at the party was all low.....class. I liked the story. They'd already gotten their revenge. This just made them look slutty. Just saying.
Why was Sally "not allowed" to give him Carlie's phone number? There could certainly be no legal reason, and why wouldn't Carlie want him to have it?
The public sex is too out there. A more likely stunt would be for her to reach under her skirt and pull her panties off and stick them in his jacket pocket as they walk off.
I enjoyed this story. Yes, it was a bit typical for a LW tale, but it entertained me. The only part that I didn't like was the public sex at the very end. It cheapened the main characters in my opinion. I understand that it was one of his goals in his revenge but there could have been a better way to handle it.
I don't really understand the nit-picking in the spelling and grammar. It does slow the flow of the reading but these are all free stories and volunteer editors. I have read some stories from foreign authors where it does become a major problem, but I imagine it is very difficult to write in a second language.
Let me get off my soapbox and say that I enjoyed this story and Thank You for your writing.
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Anonymous04/23/15
JUDGING BY THIS STORY, BLACKMAILING IS A BONE FIDE METHOD TO HAVE A COUPLE DIVORSE, TO STRIP THEM OF THEIR FINANCIAL ASSETS, & GIVE THEM A 24-HOUR TIME-LIMIT TO SIGN WHATEVER THE BLACKMAILER WANTS...
You can do all of the above to people who are in your way (plus make sure they get an STD) & it's all OK if your name is Kevin. Your lawyer helps you break the law & her husband who is a judge will work on a Xmas eve so you can get married to the only woman you love.
Is this taking place in a dystopian post-apocaliptic world or in present-day USA? Is Kevin a sociopathic manipulator or a folk hero fighting for all men whom their respective ex's took to the cleaners?
by
Anonymous08/29/15
Do you seriously think
that takin a shower after sex stops you getting syphilis? I suppose you think a woman can get pregnant from a public toilet seat too! What are you, 14?
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Anonymous03/16/16
HAHA That was bad!
So Sally Hawk got disbarred for threatening Jim. Jim didn't sign, got a restraining order preventing the dissemination of any material (including the video) involved in the divorce. When they released the tape, Sally, Carlie, the prostitutes and their pimp all went to jail. Jim's lawyer owned them in Court and Jim won millions of dollars from them all, ruined his Company for illegal termination and lived happily ever after. THAT'S how this would have ended. Not in your fairy tale manner.
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Anonymous03/25/16
Looking at HIS Ex while he's fucking the other asshole's Ex and giving her a "GOTCHA, you assholes" smile would be sweeeeeet revenge.
Kevin's final punch line... "Two cheaters who can never trust each other.... Hmm I've got a pretty good idea how that's going to work out. . . . Hey asshole... did they ever find those 'two guys who mugged you' for fucking my now EX wife? ... the same cheating slut who's sitting there keeping an eye on you while you're keeping an eye on her so you can't cheat on each other.... but you both will, won't you? That's what cheaters do. You two assholes deserve each other." Kissing Carlie, he continues, "I definitely got the best of this." his hands cupping the firm bubble butt cheeks of his wife's ass, as his thick cock fucks up into her tight, juicy pussy.
"So did I." Carlie moans... as she rides up and down, firmly thrusting her puffy blood swollen mound against his pelvis.
This is Fiction. and if the Tape's were released. What make's you think every one involved but the Cheater's Face's wouldn't be Blocked out. and the Voice's distorted. Anyway's you are taking thing's to Seriously. sound's like maybe someone stung you hmmmm
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Anonymous11/18/16
WELL IT IS FICTION
SO YOU CAN WRITE ANY OLD CRAP...NOT ONE OF YOUR BEST EFFORTS..IN FACT...BLOODY AWFUL....SO MUCH WRONG WITH IT...YET IN SOME WAYS GOOD TOO....
how they exacted revenge on the cheating pair....full of fun and humour...loved how they set up the sting with the hookers....just hope no one else was around when she fucked him at the party in front of the cheaters.....loved it...
English
I ***REALLY*** liked this story!
I've been on Literotica for a VERY log time and read many fine stories. This story was definitely in the top 3. Good writing....No, great writing!
just follow the germs
These boring clowns don't realize that the victims of their criminal assault (you'd get 5-10 or more in most county courts, more from the Feds) could be the start of a small epidemic among Jim and Karen's innocent friends; and then branch out in many different directions.
That's what it is: assault. Not an amusing payback, but assault. I know Literoticaland isn't the Real World; but to write this completely non-erotic junk as it were af example of good, clean, morally OK behaviour is sick.
You know as much about syphilis as you know about the epidemiology STDs. Marie Jalla, Los Angeles
same thing
I hope my problems work out like this....
always a good read
DG Hear's on my list
Really like the story - thank you
Never Gets Old
This is the second time I have read this story and it never gets old. It is a great story and I laugh every time when Jim and Rachel get their 'come - uppins'. I really enjoy your stories and hope you continue to write often. Keep up the good work!
DE
Excellent!!! I really enjoyed reading the chapters of "Another Man's Wife"
There to many sad ending, cuckold, wimp-ass husband stories, so this one is a gem.
Thank you for sharing your stories!!!
Excellent!
Good plot and the good guys win!
My second time reading this...still Five Stars!
Vintage DG, it just doesn't get any better!
I Wish
This is the third time I have read this story and I still find myself having a good laugh especially at the end. I wish this story was around when my first wife run off with my best mate, it could have been useful.
Just keep up the great work, and don't let the lead in your pencil run out.
Thank you!
Almost evry story which were writen by DG Hear is EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!
Nice
I really liked this story of yours. I like stories that are harder and not about all the forgiveness b.s. that many write about. Great job on this one!!!
Amazing story
I always have a soft spot for revenge story. To me a person who live in this world and be nice, but when someone screw them over it time to show them how much they can lose. I also like the fact that this man Kevin did not take it too far because he did not hurt Carrie for his revenge and in the end found love.
fucking right!
that was a good story! lol.
Revenge is Sweet
Damn fine story. Not a run of the mill story either.
Great story !!
Read what ''Madbrown'' said.....:-)
Yes, I love revenge stories.
And I also love happy endings. The syphilis was a great touch.
Really Great
Great, all three chapters. Five, five and.......4!
Four because - the last scene with her removing her pants and sticking his dick in her....not, just dropped the calibre flow of the story and characters. Aside from that, loved it!
Thanks
5,5,5 I agree -
That was awesome - I dislike the idea of revenge running someones life - but this story rocked -
A bit of a reality gap maybe on the trap but who cares - Jim and Rachel got what they earned and then some - nicely done-
Nicely written as well -
Hmmm
Very difficult to believe an officer of the court condoning the intentional infection of someone with an STD. But that was only one of many silly things that in no way really made this story any less entertaining. Thanks for writing.
Oh Yeah
The cheaters got what was coming to them. Kevin got over his evil ways and he and Carlie have a happy ending. I love it when the cheaters lose big in the end. Fuck 'em.
HA Ha ha
yes!
Well written, great flow. The 'revenge' at the end was totally suitable.
What about
Karen, the cheating wifes sister. its obvious she's cheating too so wat bcame of her?
V E R Y,
C O O L
bill
Outstanding
I love this story every time I read it.
This is very very good. You should write another series about revenge.
YEAH! VERY NICE.
Loved it. Keep up the good work.
Sweet ending!!!
Each chapter got better. I really did not know how it was going to end, but the wait was worth it. What a great way to end this story. Thanks
"they never had time to take a shower so the venereal disease was probably starting to set in."
A very surreal line.
poorly written
And the ending absolutely ruined the entire story. A 'lady' certainly would not do what they did at the end.
Great story
Keep writing
I read this again (at least the last chapter) every time I run across it.
Very apt revenge although it would have been nice to break a few bones in Jim's face (or had it done). I guess it turned out very well, served the bad couple well, especially the syphilis. Good touch!
thanks again
thanks again for a nice revenge story. the syphilis was a really nice touch.
Absolutely fantastic revenge.
Extremely well written and entertaining story of revenge You could've had him become an overnight multimillionaire with a business going thru the roof. However it was great. Thank you.
The "sting" was lame, but the story itself was enjoyable. So 4/5 stars from me.
If only someone had known
Think of all the lives that might have been saved! "Jim didn't have a chance to take a shower, so the the disease set in". Really? That simple? You can just wash off a life threatening disease? If only people that become infected with disease would wash, the dirty buggers might live? Talk about lazy, they would rather die than go to the bother of washing!
Also, throughout the 3 chapters, you referred to Kevin as 'a hard nosed son of a bitch, with a chip on his shoulder', yet failed miserably to actually demonstrate or show it. So he divorced his cheating wife. Not evil - necessary. He had sex with a married woman that threw herself to him. Again, not evil - he WAS divorced, or in the process, so not in a relationship. Karen was the one doing the cheating on her husband, not Kevin. I don't think Kevin and Bob were dating each other, so Kevin was a free agent. What else, he fell in love, and helped Carlie get revenge and a divorce, for her sake. Yeah, he was SO mean and nasty, wasn't he?
Enjoyed the story though. Just a bit of fun.
Good premise...
...but the writing was a bit infantile.
I have enjoyed other DGH stories.
This one was no exception. The writing style in this one, however, seemed a bit off. Some of the dialogue just didn't "sound" right, considering the above average smarts these characters had. Additionally, there was too much passive voice for my taste. (It was like scraping fingernails on a chalkboard.) I was confused about jobs. Did Jim, Rachel, and Carlie all work for the same company?
a lot of class
Unfortunately the final stunt at the party was all low.....class. I liked the story. They'd already gotten their revenge. This just made them look slutty. Just saying.
Silly
Silly dialog. Silly actions. Silly characters.
It could have been a great story, but the silly dragged it down.
Not Bad
Two issues:
Why was Sally "not allowed" to give him Carlie's phone number? There could certainly be no legal reason, and why wouldn't Carlie want him to have it?
The public sex is too out there. A more likely stunt would be for her to reach under her skirt and pull her panties off and stick them in his jacket pocket as they walk off.
Entertaining Story!
I enjoyed this story. Yes, it was a bit typical for a LW tale, but it entertained me. The only part that I didn't like was the public sex at the very end. It cheapened the main characters in my opinion. I understand that it was one of his goals in his revenge but there could have been a better way to handle it.
I don't really understand the nit-picking in the spelling and grammar. It does slow the flow of the reading but these are all free stories and volunteer editors. I have read some stories from foreign authors where it does become a major problem, but I imagine it is very difficult to write in a second language.
Let me get off my soapbox and say that I enjoyed this story and Thank You for your writing.
JUDGING BY THIS STORY, BLACKMAILING IS A BONE FIDE METHOD TO HAVE A COUPLE DIVORSE, TO STRIP THEM OF THEIR FINANCIAL ASSETS, & GIVE THEM A 24-HOUR TIME-LIMIT TO SIGN WHATEVER THE BLACKMAILER WANTS...
You can do all of the above to people who are in your way (plus make sure they get an STD) & it's all OK if your name is Kevin. Your lawyer helps you break the law & her husband who is a judge will work on a Xmas eve so you can get married to the only woman you love.
Is this taking place in a dystopian post-apocaliptic world or in present-day USA? Is Kevin a sociopathic manipulator or a folk hero fighting for all men whom their respective ex's took to the cleaners?
Do you seriously think
that takin a shower after sex stops you getting syphilis? I suppose you think a woman can get pregnant from a public toilet seat too! What are you, 14?
HAHA That was bad!
So Sally Hawk got disbarred for threatening Jim. Jim didn't sign, got a restraining order preventing the dissemination of any material (including the video) involved in the divorce. When they released the tape, Sally, Carlie, the prostitutes and their pimp all went to jail. Jim's lawyer owned them in Court and Jim won millions of dollars from them all, ruined his Company for illegal termination and lived happily ever after. THAT'S how this would have ended. Not in your fairy tale manner.
Looking at HIS Ex while he's fucking the other asshole's Ex and giving her a "GOTCHA, you assholes" smile would be sweeeeeet revenge.
Kevin's final punch line... "Two cheaters who can never trust each other.... Hmm I've got a pretty good idea how that's going to work out. . . . Hey asshole... did they ever find those 'two guys who mugged you' for fucking my now EX wife? ... the same cheating slut who's sitting there keeping an eye on you while you're keeping an eye on her so you can't cheat on each other.... but you both will, won't you? That's what cheaters do. You two assholes deserve each other." Kissing Carlie, he continues, "I definitely got the best of this." his hands cupping the firm bubble butt cheeks of his wife's ass, as his thick cock fucks up into her tight, juicy pussy.
"So did I." Carlie moans... as she rides up and down, firmly thrusting her puffy blood swollen mound against his pelvis.
One of your best
I have read a lot of your stories. I read this trio 3 times. Still my favorite.
HA HA !!
This is Fiction. and if the Tape's were released. What make's you think every one involved but the Cheater's Face's wouldn't be Blocked out. and the Voice's distorted. Anyway's you are taking thing's to Seriously. sound's like maybe someone stung you hmmmm
WELL IT IS FICTION
SO YOU CAN WRITE ANY OLD CRAP...NOT ONE OF YOUR BEST EFFORTS..IN FACT...BLOODY AWFUL....SO MUCH WRONG WITH IT...YET IN SOME WAYS GOOD TOO....
that was good and so funny
how they exacted revenge on the cheating pair....full of fun and humour...loved how they set up the sting with the hookers....just hope no one else was around when she fucked him at the party in front of the cheaters.....loved it...
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