by wildsweetone
Structurally, there is no comparison between your writing now and when I first started reading you. The advance in sophistication has been rapid. I still think you need to improve word choice, be much more picky with it, to not only ensure clarity but also to stay clear of everyone's natural tendency toward cliche.
TRM....when he first started reading you was less than a week ago for being a brand spanking new poet <grin> ..hehehe....
very nice poem wild~