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very metaphoric. This poem communicates a lot with its images, which I think makes for really good poetry. I kind of don't like the phrase "drops her drawers" because the rest of the poem makes its point in a less direct way, so the phrase is distracting. I think it would be a smoother read without it. Otherwise I think it's really good--should be submitted to a poetry journal. Just my opinion. :)
Angeline
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A little truth here ~
The older and plainer she gets
The more ostentatious her vanity;
Equilibrium maintained.
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Alicia told me that it is a pece of furniture name & a personsality too. That makesit all the more better!!!
Its not ZEN, but it's VERY good!
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