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I AM SORRY
i did not check the correct button. the comments were turned off. that violated a basic rennet of mine. i am sorry.
it will NOT happen again
i am always open to the slings and arrows.
Nice
Good start maybe someone will write a great ending
Darn you H20wader
You started off an intresting story, but now I'm curious how you would have ended it.
But if Literotica history has told me anything, its that most of the writers will have the guy still get married because everyone knows that males in Literotica are desperate for attention from any female and will put up with anything to get it (^_^)
everybody want to be hitchcock
the director of the story and not the finisher.i don't get it,a story comes to the writer mind and he can't or want finish the story.why would another writer do better with his story.writer on this site are about to become a joke,first not finishing stories and now half a chapter as a story.you writers are losing fan by the day for your selfish thinking.just one fan opinion.
A Yawner
First of all, to have all of that information divulged in one quick phone call is unbelievable. We learned everything about those two but their birthdates. When you unfolded all of that information so soon I suspected that the story would be short, and it was. There was as much suspense here as in the checkout line of a supermarket. My general response at the end was…ho hum.
Should there be a follow on story? Well, if you are true to the tone and style of the original tale then you’ll need only to write a couple more paragraphs.
Bullshit
Reading this was a waste of my time. You can do better.
Chill
Chill "Bullshit"!! Geez, H20 is just trying to give some other writers a chance to run with an idea. Wish I had a lick of writing ability but I don't. So like I said chill and let see what happens.
Rennet ? ?
Rennet ? ? ?
The inner lining of the fourth stomach of calves and other young ruminants.
. . . or
A dried extract made from the stomach lining of a ruminant, used in cheesemaking to curdle milk.
Or maybe it's "Tenet" ( R & T are close on the Keyboard, and Spellcheckers are famous for their unwitting blunders )
An opinion, doctrine, or principle held as being true by a person or especially by an organization.
Oh yes, the story is great. Like a tree-trunk, I can see many tales branching off THIS little piece
Kilroy.
Solution
Ditch the bitch and find another woman.
Boyd
What
I would like to know is how Harry could hear both sides of the conversatio. Even if he picked up an extension, she would have heard it and not revealed anything. Maybe I missed it how he could hear both sides.
Why write this?
Your lack of interest in this story is evident in your lack of attention to detail. It was flat out boring. As to your writing,find a topic that you enjoy or give it up.
Interesting proposition!
I think it is an interesting set up.
Let's see what transpires!
By the way, I didn't understand the comment from Anonymous about both sides of the conversation. At no time was there any indication that he could hear Laura's comments.
Similar
It is similar to Torn but without the detailed set-up or the love that was shared between the married partners. Still, there is enough here to take the story in any number of different directions.
Gee
Good story, I would like to write an ending to this one Also..... Please
Gee
Good story, I would like to write an ending to this one Also..... Please
Very Interesting
I am quite intrigued. However, I hate cheaters.
Very interesting and challenging
A short, great start for a story -
No matter what the truth she is betraying him and deserves to be trashed -
If there is some sort of innocent like answer she should have given it to him l9ong ago -
Unfinished
Always 1* for an unfinished story. Besides, it read like a middle school theme paper. People in real life don't talk like this.
5
fuck you annony
5
great story
Muscle contractions
Goosebumps, pupil dilation, natural lubrication, skin flushing, nipple and clit arousal: They are much harder to fake than vocal response.
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