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Sad or a hidden strength
Very well written and deserving of a second or third read.
Needs Strophe Breaks
I would suggest that you break this into strophes. Beyond that I will not comment. - This poem is too close and personal for me.
Definitely requires multiple reads before voting or commenting!
I don't like the emotions you bring back to me, but I acknowledge them. - A must read!
Good reading.
I disagree with the comment below. I do not think strophe breaks are necessary at all. I like it fine just the way it is.
Grammatically (and you are punctuating here according to rule), the semi-colon after line 6 is incorrect.
Your poem is mentioned
in the New Poem Review thread: http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=1 5408586#post15408586
jim : )
Your poem is mentioned
in the New Poem Review thread: http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=1 5408586#post15408586
jim : )
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Another wonderfully haunting write
Culling emotions unseen
From the reader's own soul...
•) as always awesome
Invited in to your kitchen
I treasure these little moments
when I can warm my hands
with a cup of tea or chocolate
so we can trade stories
that table looks
so very much like a map
or ancient aztec plain lines
that once had meaning
and now have lingering mystery
i imagine a country there sometimes
trying to see you as a child
playing in those streets
biting inventory
I liked it...its worth the second read to get its impacted.
thank you for a glimps into your world.
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