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Your poem was mentioned in the new poems review thread.
There are some nice lines here.
But even the rambling style you choose to write in should have a progression to it, to be effective poetry. Quality rambles, they ramble 'toward' something. This spend much time spinning wheels, going nowhere.
I have read quite a few things by you, but never commented (I don't think). I like your style, your use of hesitation and quick rhyme. In my opinion, you need to have an objective in mind when you write. The talent is obvious, on a line by line level, but your message seems to me to be the same poem after poem. Simply put, you need to say something worth hearing, and when you do, say something else next time. In my opinion, you need to expand your vision...too many reruns.
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