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As with the first installment
As with the first installment this one was lean on details and was rushed. You have the thoughts in you mind but you don't share the actions. Learn to linger a little on each activity and draw out the ordeal you are putting each character through.
First Installment
Where is the first installment???
Hardly Plausible - Who Would Allow This - Only
those who want it so this doesn't wash - isn't credible - just a weak sexually impaired man child with an equally dumb weak girlie poo.
So as silly as this is, it doesn't arouse any plausible feelings one way or another.
The writing isn't bad but the plot path leaks more than sick urine - Oh did he go pottie yet???
Methinks you have a better more plausible yarn in mind?
the brevity is the icing
Hi chat, I havenet seen the first part, but the second part was better on its own, with just an occasional referance to the first. The pace was fantastic, never slackening off. I loved it, and could understand the forced submission of the traumatised couple, that was the biggest turnon.
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