by dark_kitty
from the teaser I thought she would end up being his girlfriend.
Thank you for your comments and this is my first attempt at writing so if anyone has any suggestions to help me in future stories please let me know. :)
I liked that you kept this story completely non-consent, no change of heart, purely physical. Bravo!
It was an okay rape erotica, the actual sex parts were decently written, but it could have used more build up. Also, you had quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes which detracts from the quality of the story.
But you are not at all a bad writer and should keep it up. ^_^
I loved this story. I love that she fought him from the very beginning, and she never gave up. I also enjoyed his death scene immensely. I may have a twisted tendency to get off on rape fantasy, but it's just fantasy; I think real life violent rape should be added to the list of offenses punishable by death.
This story is much more realistic than a lot of the rape stories I've read. To think that a rape victim wouldn't fight or report her rapist is ridiculous.
I like it is real rape story I may have a twisted fantasy but I like it especially because it's realistic aswell as erotic bravo
signed
sweet_Celeste
A real rape story.
That's the best kind.
Maybe I'm a little twisted to but I love when my lover wants to hurt me and hold me down.
See, this is what I like to read. I hate reading a story where the girl starts liking it and it ends with her thanking him for a good fucking. Not that I want people to get shot, but seriously, this is great. Maybe more detail. :)
I agree with anon 8/6/12. my dad is a country boy from the south, he gave me a 6'' inch hunting knife for protection... so I loved this 1. the girl did not punk out.
Dark_Kitty, I know you have written this some time ago...but you must, I mean you have to, you cannot let this be it.
Pleeeeeeeease write part 2 :)