I loved the story and the content and ideas, but there were a few typos that need to be corrected. It takes a little away when it says one thing, but should be another and you need to stop and go back to continue the train of thought
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Anonymous01/12/06
I thought I read this story before.
Oh yes--It's the dressing room story. It shows up every other day.
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good story, needs editing
I loved the story and the content and ideas, but there were a few typos that need to be corrected. It takes a little away when it says one thing, but should be another and you need to stop and go back to continue the train of thought
I thought I read this story before.
Oh yes--It's the dressing room story. It shows up every other day.
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Read the "Shopping Trip to the Mall"
Loved it, you have a wonderful imagination, like all your work.
Jobeth
loved it
great story kaz, i wish my shopping trips where like that !!
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