All Comments on 'Digital Camera on the Beach'

You should have added "Chapter 1" to the title.

At least the reader would have been prepared for the quick, terrible ending.

It started off as a great story, but the ending was a disapointment, unless of course, you intend to contine.

Lead in was great- then you got bored

Very erotic situation, good build up of tension - and the whole action in one sentence. What a waste !

What's the hurry? Slow down and give us details.

I don't think you even have the concept of eroticism. I recently read a technical review of a digital camera - it turned me on more.

I don't normally comment, but I thought your writing was good. I don't have time to read a lot, but I thoroughly enjoy the "wham bam, thank you mam" approach. I get off every time! Most of all, I enjoy that almost all your stories have the older man/younger woman theme. Almost all have the male in a superior position too. I love it!! Keep writing!!

Really? He fucks her at the end and the description of fucking is exactly one sentence. You had a pretty good story, finish it right next time.

as teachers write in school reports 'could do better'