I admit, well put together story and as a stand alone it deserves a 100, but I'm a HUGE fan of husband revenge stories and thats what I want, a followup where the husband avenges himself on EVERYONE, from every guy who did his wife to the slut herself. So this only got a 50. I hope you'll follow this up.
We need more of this one! Did your wife's belly begin growing "from that seed" that was planted in her tummy? Do more guys start fucking her as well?
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Anonymous01/05/06
Auck Someone Put The Poor Dumb Man Away
Gosh another braindead male who needs to visit the wizzard for a new one.
Hardly satisfying to think sad little hubbie took no recourse as the writer implies, but then the writer didn't give him a brain. Perhaps he will go more true to life in chapter 2 or just not go back to work or home in shame.
Donnie , you are one fucked up piece of humanity. Sound like a catholic. You should have about 300 little bastard kids to take care of. That probably still would not be enough for you.
Your idea that every fuck with a married woman should result in the guy knocking up the other guy's wife. You must really hate all married men, either way one sick piece of shit.
As far as the story was concerned and the writing . It was great.
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Anonymous01/05/06
This story needs a second part
Good writing but one of your best stories was "Marty Misbehaves" where we saw great character development.
Thanks for writing.
And now that he knows his wife is a cheating slut, he can plan. Given the fact that he's portrayed as being a person who knows everything about where the skeletons are buried, it shouldn't be hard for him to get revenge on all involved. Just make sure he knows who ALL the players are, then open up the giant can of Whoop Ass on every one of them and let the chips fall where they may. The slut gets divorced and the rest of the men get clobbered. Although I imagine it ending that way, it would have been nice if you had written it that way. Thanks Bob.
Good so far
This can be good, don't take to long to get on with this. Good work ..... Frank
Nice story!
I don't know your plans but this is fine as either a stand alone or with a follow-up!
Something different and interesting!
REVENGE!
I admit, well put together story and as a stand alone it deserves a 100, but I'm a HUGE fan of husband revenge stories and thats what I want, a followup where the husband avenges himself on EVERYONE, from every guy who did his wife to the slut herself. So this only got a 50. I hope you'll follow this up.
Breeding time?
We need more of this one! Did your wife's belly begin growing "from that seed" that was planted in her tummy? Do more guys start fucking her as well?
Breeding time?
We need more of this one! Did your wife's belly begin growing "from that seed" that was planted in her tummy? Do more guys start fucking her as well?
Auck Someone Put The Poor Dumb Man Away
Gosh another braindead male who needs to visit the wizzard for a new one.
Hardly satisfying to think sad little hubbie took no recourse as the writer implies, but then the writer didn't give him a brain. Perhaps he will go more true to life in chapter 2 or just not go back to work or home in shame.
How will we ever cheer up the Pitiful sap?
men don't like you fucking their wife
revenge is a bitch if the writer got the balls.
The plot was obvious
and the tale was told well. I'll go look and see if there is a sequel. That could be interesting.
Sick Donnie strikes yet again.
Donnie , you are one fucked up piece of humanity. Sound like a catholic. You should have about 300 little bastard kids to take care of. That probably still would not be enough for you.
Your idea that every fuck with a married woman should result in the guy knocking up the other guy's wife. You must really hate all married men, either way one sick piece of shit.
As far as the story was concerned and the writing . It was great.
This story needs a second part
Good writing but one of your best stories was "Marty Misbehaves" where we saw great character development.
Thanks for writing.
SleeplessinMD
Please another Chapter(s)
Suprise at the end. Another chapter(s) please
Great story
You seem to always suprise.
good
A nother chapter please on how he get even with his wife and all of them. come on you can do it
One never knows
You continue to surprise me with these great stories you've turned out lately.
Divorce her now!
real simple get rid of the slut now!
Of course we all probably knew it was going to be his wife, right? Will there be more to this story?
Well the good news is that he knows
And now that he knows his wife is a cheating slut, he can plan. Given the fact that he's portrayed as being a person who knows everything about where the skeletons are buried, it shouldn't be hard for him to get revenge on all involved. Just make sure he knows who ALL the players are, then open up the giant can of Whoop Ass on every one of them and let the chips fall where they may. The slut gets divorced and the rest of the men get clobbered. Although I imagine it ending that way, it would have been nice if you had written it that way. Thanks Bob.
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