All Comments on 'Kelly & Haley's Summer Ch. 02'

Well written ! I look forward to reading a new series of stories by you with a different group of girls - all involving piss and toilets. I have written one story which you might like to read http://www.literotica.com/s/convent-toilet-slave and I am writing an updated version.

Please go back and edit. While the story itself is good, you keep switching from 1st person to 3rd person. Many inconsistencies when for Haley. First her clothes are removed, then they are back on. Had issues with who was saying and doing what to whom.