Thank You!
It is important to be able to move on, one tragedy shouldn't wreck two lives, if it is avoidable, I think THIS is an important thought you show us!
John
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Anonymous01/20/06
i like your stories,keep them coming
great writing and thanks for your time with these stories.
beautiful. Heartfelt and beautifuly written. I loved it, it recalled another similar story, "Laura's Vineyard." My thanks, Jack. This is a winner across the board.
I knew this one was a winner from the start. Thank you for allowing me to edit for you. Keep them coming, it seems your fans want more......smiles.......angel
DJ:
Why the thanks? I'll send it to you in private, but I want you to know publicly that you have one hell of a story here. I don't expect anything less from you, 'cause you're good. 'Naw your're great. Thank You. Ronnie W.
This is the first Tale of yours that I have read. I can see why it rates so high on the Top Story list. Guess I better read more of your tales. This was really a touching tale. Thanks
I don't quite understand why you made it so hard for him to see the obvious. After all the care and attention from Erin and Cindy throughout his grievance period... You then had him divert to Jillian and a brief affair. You offered that he thought maybe Clara had meant that he be with Jillian? What does that have to do with him falling in love with someone he could be happy with? He had been rescued by Erin and Cindy's attention and he couldn't see that he was attracted to them? In the story it sounds to me like he was rejected by Jillian before he even considered Erin! I think it would have been a beautiful romance story without Jillian having ever been introduced into the picture! Me thinks you tried to make it a bit too complicated... I can see where Erin would be pissed. She realized that she loved the hero, but the hero was looking elsewhere at first! I guess that this is commonplace, but not as romantic as it could have been! The story was good, but not as great a romantic story as it could have been... Just an opinion. Sorry!
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Anonymous12/21/09
loved it!
I started to read it, and couldn't stop! I'm late for lunch, but as I live alone, that doesn't matter. You teased me as you jumped from one to another. I understand, as I lost my partner of 60 years five years ago. We had a loving relationship, as Mich and Clara did. You touch the heart strings with your writing. Keep on touching!!
I came across references to Jake on DG Hear's favorites list and am so glad. His grammar is excellent, his editor does a good job, I'm typically only seeing a few errors per story and his vocabulary is superb. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of his stories.
I just couldn't get past all the exlamation points. Over 130 on 3 pages. I try not to get too anal about grammar but was starting to cringe every paragraph.
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Anonymous12/01/12
A Race
Great story. Really enjoyed reading it :-)
Thought: the end seemed a tad rushed. Adding a wedding scene with the use of the timeshare (and a bit more on his article writing) would have, I felt, rounded this story out.
Honestly it is a lovely story. It had everything from sadness to joy, intermixed with travel and a refreshing dose of real life. You captured the way it is for us poor mortal men trying so hard to walk the minefields of female emotions perfectly. I think most of all you caught just the right touch of sex without graphic description that makes all the difference between a romance and a run of the mill pornographic writing exercise. I do so look forward to reading more of your work.
He had already met Jillian and knew her story - he was confused by his feelings - ALL of them - then he saw Jillian again and she more than receptive - THEN the cruise any guy would have fallen into the same pattern in that situation. He found a happy receptive willing women he was attracted to during his grief period and acted without full thought - damn what a human being LOL
Then there was Erin who behaved strangely - to say the least - he got the help they both needed to work it out and all was well - but many would never have gotten around to that without the help -
A lovely little story about love lost,and found. Somehow,Cindy turned out to be the star of the show,so to speak, in an impish way.
One thing seemed to be reoccurring and that was Michael's "romance" with the bottle.Whether it was wine,or brandy,or single malt,he always seemed to be dipping his beak. Had a feeling that Dr. Erin would cut back on his intake.
English
Great!
A great story with the right amount of sensitivity and compassion.
Thank you
Warms the heart. The scene at Chirstmas was very touching.
I have enjoyed your writing and look forward to your next work.
Thank you.
It is still heartwarming, these stories of yours!
Thank You!
It is important to be able to move on, one tragedy shouldn't wreck two lives, if it is avoidable, I think THIS is an important thought you show us!
John
i like your stories,keep them coming
great writing and thanks for your time with these stories.
vry good
very well writtenA great story of extreme sadnes then a second chance for happenness. I will be looking for your next one
vry good
very well writtenA great story of extreme sadnes then a second chance for happenness. I will be looking for your next one
Nice read, Jack
Very romantic story; nicely written. Good work!
Nicely done
Valid portrait of how good people can't always find the right words and actions. Best, Ken
Absolutely
beautiful. Heartfelt and beautifuly written. I loved it, it recalled another similar story, "Laura's Vineyard." My thanks, Jack. This is a winner across the board.
I was sad when it ended...
...because I wanted to read more. It was beautifully written and the characters were wonderfully drawn. My compliments to you on a fine piece.
Smiling softly
I knew this one was a winner from the start. Thank you for allowing me to edit for you. Keep them coming, it seems your fans want more......smiles.......angel
Once again you have blown me away!
I love how you make the reader really feel the sadness, confusion and joy of your characters! I look forward to more from you DJ... Declan
With all my heart, thank you
DJ:
Why the thanks? I'll send it to you in private, but I want you to know publicly that you have one hell of a story here. I don't expect anything less from you, 'cause you're good. 'Naw your're great. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Wippe away the tears
This is the first Tale of yours that I have read. I can see why it rates so high on the Top Story list. Guess I better read more of your tales. This was really a touching tale. Thanks
excellent
Wonderful story, as usual.
Good
I don't quite understand why you made it so hard for him to see the obvious. After all the care and attention from Erin and Cindy throughout his grievance period... You then had him divert to Jillian and a brief affair. You offered that he thought maybe Clara had meant that he be with Jillian? What does that have to do with him falling in love with someone he could be happy with? He had been rescued by Erin and Cindy's attention and he couldn't see that he was attracted to them? In the story it sounds to me like he was rejected by Jillian before he even considered Erin! I think it would have been a beautiful romance story without Jillian having ever been introduced into the picture! Me thinks you tried to make it a bit too complicated... I can see where Erin would be pissed. She realized that she loved the hero, but the hero was looking elsewhere at first! I guess that this is commonplace, but not as romantic as it could have been! The story was good, but not as great a romantic story as it could have been... Just an opinion. Sorry!
loved it!
I started to read it, and couldn't stop! I'm late for lunch, but as I live alone, that doesn't matter. You teased me as you jumped from one to another. I understand, as I lost my partner of 60 years five years ago. We had a loving relationship, as Mich and Clara did. You touch the heart strings with your writing. Keep on touching!!
Excellent story
I came across references to Jake on DG Hear's favorites list and am so glad. His grammar is excellent, his editor does a good job, I'm typically only seeing a few errors per story and his vocabulary is superb. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of his stories.
Good story, but...
I just couldn't get past all the exlamation points. Over 130 on 3 pages. I try not to get too anal about grammar but was starting to cringe every paragraph.
A Race
Great story. Really enjoyed reading it :-)
Thought: the end seemed a tad rushed. Adding a wedding scene with the use of the timeshare (and a bit more on his article writing) would have, I felt, rounded this story out.
ITS ALWAYS LIKE THAT
a dry spell followed by a glut of romantic interludes, TK U MLJ LV NV
Lovely story!
Honestly it is a lovely story. It had everything from sadness to joy, intermixed with travel and a refreshing dose of real life. You captured the way it is for us poor mortal men trying so hard to walk the minefields of female emotions perfectly. I think most of all you caught just the right touch of sex without graphic description that makes all the difference between a romance and a run of the mill pornographic writing exercise. I do so look forward to reading more of your work.
He was human -
He had already met Jillian and knew her story - he was confused by his feelings - ALL of them - then he saw Jillian again and she more than receptive - THEN the cruise any guy would have fallen into the same pattern in that situation. He found a happy receptive willing women he was attracted to during his grief period and acted without full thought - damn what a human being LOL
Then there was Erin who behaved strangely - to say the least - he got the help they both needed to work it out and all was well - but many would never have gotten around to that without the help -
I liked it lot -
Very Nice
A lovely little story about love lost,and found. Somehow,Cindy turned out to be the star of the show,so to speak, in an impish way.
One thing seemed to be reoccurring and that was Michael's "romance" with the bottle.Whether it was wine,or brandy,or single malt,he always seemed to be dipping his beak. Had a feeling that Dr. Erin would cut back on his intake.
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