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I dont know
what this has to do with gravity, but it is different and wonderful.I know I will read again and again. I like it, it almost confused me./ Different is good ;)
write more, please?
The Smell of Levity
Interesting mish-mash of unusual subjects to predicates. - I could do without the 'barf'.
quirky
Quirky with a capital Q but good as always! :)
Kisses,
T
grinin'
this poem is filled with images that grasp
~
I like it because it's different, and I really need something different to read! So many poems are starting to sound the same. And it's just not different. It's good. I hate the word barf, though. Ugly word. Ugly image.
I voted before....
...I read the other comments and gave you a five for your fresh voice but I see Evie beat me with her comment - so, 'nuff said.
(Eve, could you stop now? I'm getting a bruise.)
Tess
Gravity is red and loud.
Synesthesia makes us proud.
Er, whatever. I like funky poems, BD, and this one is funky. Makes me wanna dance. You don't wanta see that, though. Five and done, OK?
*
at your best, you are a real mind-fucker. Jesus, Bill.
"Hat me my going,
it’s almost today."
this is good, it annouces this strange trip, and you just don't let up.
"dry mouths for all the barf
that fills a confessional on
it’s way to the indictment."
Really can't think of a better word than "barf", made me think of Tom Delay, Ken Lay and Frito-Lay all at the same time
•)
bless me farther
I have signed
my life love away
betype hard lines
entrenched in trenchant
bunkerky debrevity
his and her siding
somewhere I lost track
of all the pointless points
you seem to have found,
so can I borrow a cup of sugar?
Most certainly, interesting reading.
Hat me my going,
it’s almost today . . .
is the best start to a poem that I've read here this new year.
I don't think the last 2 strophes, particularly the last one, carry the strength of the first three (and I'm okay with "barf")- but this is real good poetry. No doubt about it. :)
almost lives up
to your name dada. the last lines seem to lose the random flow.
From Under the Bridge
Yuck. Poetry? Hardly.
From Under the Bridge
Yuck. Poetry? Hardly.
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