All Comments on 'All The Next Hellos'

Ouch ~

Well done ~

No wonder it's so hard

For relationships to get off the ground

When competing with "ghosts."

Good use of metaphor throughout. The last line seems superfluous-- the poem ends very well before it. I'm also not sure about "crumble" with "roots".

Thanks for sharing.

Fly

. . .is the most interesting poem I've read from you. The first reading made me want to read it again, more closely.

IMO, Fly's advice is excellent. I think the verb "crumble" is not the best one in that spot and should be replaced with one that jives better with "roots." Also, I think the last line is weakening to the poem as a whole and shoud be removed.

Nice reading.

A literary portrait of a love ~ grown cold.

Sometimes the words just "click" and they come out on their own. No need to edit. I really like it.

it allows the reader to run with it....