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by TheRainMan01/20/06

Your style is unique...

...and very pleasant to read, but sometimes I think you press too hard with the wordplay, unneccesarily, until it seems to the reader that the whole point is the word tangling - and thus the poem might appear more like a playtime frolic than a group of words that might have something interesting to say as a whole.

I'd like you see you balance the two better - to take some of the emphasis off the euphonics.

I also think you should not post a pile of new poems the same day, as it might prevent a higher quantity of comments, which any writer would like.

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by Reltne01/20/06

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Very VERY good advice from TRM.

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by Anonymous01/20/06

Windhover

There are those who cannot, will not, dare not appreciate the exquisite word artistry in your poem. They lose, their loss, you're not less for it -- they are.

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by KR01/24/06

Clever and fun

For what it is worth, I enjoyed this one immensely. I've many non-native english speakers who seem to enjoy the same word-play you do.

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