by clutching_calliope
This is fabulous and I love you. The mask is a nice touch.
I am not speechless, though. I stutter and drool pretty well.
Yikes.
Your writing on the threads has been gorgeous, as is this.
Stick around, pretty please.
is very impressive. I really liked the ending lines. I, too, have read your work in the passion thread, and agree with TheRainMan. Definitely, stick around. You have talent! I can't wait to read more. Write on!
saldne
I thoroughly enjoyed the poem, it's musicality and bravery in word choices. Welcome to Lit indeed.
I can't help but say there is certain air of cheekiness in the delivery of this poem. Nice work.
Welcome, I'm sorry I can't be so effusive. A little overdone
"from the curse of IN
(fidelity, somnia, ebriated, corrigible)."
comes off as a little too cute, for starters.
Welcome to lit, I have also enjoyed reading your work on the threads. I really tried with this poem, especially coming so highly recommended, but while I like the feel and sound of some of the lines, I could not get an overall feel for what you were trying to say. Trust me, I know this means little for me to say this, as I am sure you have a clear reason in your mind, and you have reached many people here. I like that you have an unconventional voice and can tell you have talent and intelligence. I look forward to reading more of your work!
annaswirls