This was more than the smutty little tale you told me about, I could feel the love that the characters have for each other. I thought it was very well written, and very erotic. Congratulations
This was more than the smutty little tale you told me about, I could feel the love that the characters have for each other. I thought it was very well written, and very erotic. Congratulations
In the quest for smut, so many undervalue the hands. Thanks for so effectively reminding readers just how incredibly scintillating hand play can be! (I reaaaaaaaally wanna take a bus ride ... right NOW!) ~Imp
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01/21/06
Mmmmm!!!!
Very hot and erotic. I love sex in public, even sleeping bus type public. You do talk dirty well, Ash. The shower scene was slick and hot and the wet tee shirt added a beautiful touch. The little things in your story made it so much better than the average story.
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Anonymous01/21/06
excellent!
The perfect story!! Very erotic, I felt like I was there.
hot story. I especially liked the details of making love in the shower. With great alacrity, in a disclaimer before my rather bland contest entry, I will recommend this story to readers seeking hot, descriptons of loving sex.
Wonderful and hot story, Dampy! I especially loved your descriptions of the shower scene! Very sensual. And the thrill of fooling around in such a public place... priceless. Good luck to you.
of a honeymoon I shared with 60 or so people on a bus. My new wife and I did everything except screw standing in the aisle! It was very memorable. So is this story. It is my hope that you wrote the story from memory!
a great job oh showing how some of us are lucky enough to find everything we need, want and desire in love! awesome write...
now, if people would stop settling for less...they'd wait to find that the truly right love for them is just around the corner! LOL ;)
~LB~
What a sexy story. So well told! You really have the knack for getting right to the point. Of course you realize, it helps the rest of us get 'right to the point.'
One of the cutest stories I have read. I have an affinity for public transportation, nearly equal to that of Eric and Leah. I had been trying to cure myself...until now.
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Anonymous02/10/06
Sweet, and Hot
This story reminds me of some types of cuisine from Southeast Asia, sweet, and hot. Very well done. I like the delicate balance you achieved between a deep love, and an unbridled lust.
Omg...that was so hot, I'm just speechless (and a little breathless). All I can say is, wow...keep up the great work! ~Lexi
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Anonymous04/06/06
Ah the memories
Beautiful story DP the bus bit reminds me so much of me an my fiance not that long ago :) must try the shower with clothes soob ;) Keep up the excellent work, very well written in both its content and its conveyance, it was like i was there. T.B.
A masterful writer. Sex plus sensuous plus attentive amore. The plot was simple, the execution was flawless. Bravo and thanks for sharing.
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Anonymous04/25/11
What a gr8 concept
If 'they' would renovate their terminals, and clean the buses more often it might just be possible for them to regain some of the travel ler market - All they would be to initiate a "Frequent Pumper" miles program..
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Loved It
This was more than the smutty little tale you told me about, I could feel the love that the characters have for each other. I thought it was very well written, and very erotic. Congratulations
Loved It
This was more than the smutty little tale you told me about, I could feel the love that the characters have for each other. I thought it was very well written, and very erotic. Congratulations
Mmmm
In the quest for smut, so many undervalue the hands. Thanks for so effectively reminding readers just how incredibly scintillating hand play can be! (I reaaaaaaaally wanna take a bus ride ... right NOW!) ~Imp
Mmmmm!!!!
Very hot and erotic. I love sex in public, even sleeping bus type public. You do talk dirty well, Ash. The shower scene was slick and hot and the wet tee shirt added a beautiful touch. The little things in your story made it so much better than the average story.
excellent!
The perfect story!! Very erotic, I felt like I was there.
A very
hot story. I especially liked the details of making love in the shower. With great alacrity, in a disclaimer before my rather bland contest entry, I will recommend this story to readers seeking hot, descriptons of loving sex.
Very hot and very good
Could be used as a model for a short story with a lot of sex but interesting characters and situations. Good work.
Rumple
Very Hot
Well done as usual, DP, glad to see you're back! :)
Sailor
Good Work
WOW is all I can say.... takes my breath away.... smutty little tale? Much More.
The Wheels of the Bus Go Round and Round...
Wonderful and hot story, Dampy! I especially loved your descriptions of the shower scene! Very sensual. And the thrill of fooling around in such a public place... priceless. Good luck to you.
every mile...
mixed with every word breathed into a tantalizing tale! Good luck and thank you (damppanties) for the erotic literary journey. (~_*)
Wow.
Sexy, hot, well-written and delightfully naughty.
Terrific work here, dampy.
Good luck in the contest!
~Sarah
Brought back memories
of a honeymoon I shared with 60 or so people on a bus. My new wife and I did everything except screw standing in the aisle! It was very memorable. So is this story. It is my hope that you wrote the story from memory!
Well done!
You need to write your own novel
The best I've ever read!
Real love and Hot sex... What a marriage! =)
Very Nice
Very nicely written. I love how you captured the unbridled lust of togetherness alone and then amid the other passengers on the bus.
you do...
a great job oh showing how some of us are lucky enough to find everything we need, want and desire in love! awesome write...
now, if people would stop settling for less...they'd wait to find that the truly right love for them is just around the corner! LOL ;)
~LB~
A Very Sensous Story.
DP,
What a sexy story. So well told! You really have the knack for getting right to the point. Of course you realize, it helps the rest of us get 'right to the point.'
duddle146
this story makes me wish
that on all those long overnight bus rides i took last year i hadn't been alone... ah well, i will try to do better on this year's bus rides...
great story...
Whew!
Very very hot.
I'm getting in the shower now!!
Excellent
One of the cutest stories I have read. I have an affinity for public transportation, nearly equal to that of Eric and Leah. I had been trying to cure myself...until now.
Sweet, and Hot
This story reminds me of some types of cuisine from Southeast Asia, sweet, and hot. Very well done. I like the delicate balance you achieved between a deep love, and an unbridled lust.
Wow...
Omg...that was so hot, I'm just speechless (and a little breathless). All I can say is, wow...keep up the great work! ~Lexi
Ah the memories
Beautiful story DP the bus bit reminds me so much of me an my fiance not that long ago :) must try the shower with clothes soob ;) Keep up the excellent work, very well written in both its content and its conveyance, it was like i was there. T.B.
As always..
Sexily told.. delivered steaming hot..
Nice work, DP.
What else can be said!
Another great story!
One of the Best
A masterful writer. Sex plus sensuous plus attentive amore. The plot was simple, the execution was flawless. Bravo and thanks for sharing.
What a gr8 concept
If 'they' would renovate their terminals, and clean the buses more often it might just be possible for them to regain some of the travel ler market - All they would be to initiate a "Frequent Pumper" miles program..
Excellent
Great job. Very believable characters, chemistry, and situation!
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