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I thought this story was one of the best I've read in a long time. It kept you wondering what was going to happen next. It was extremely well written.
Ending like a car wreck
Extremely well written, and a great premise with perfect execution, but goddamn, the ending gave me whiplash. LoL A softer or more complete ending would have guaranteed you a top finish, imo; far too many dangling plot questions. Good luck, all the same.
I agree with kev...it was good until the end
and...???
It was very hot... really had me going! But, it felt unfinished, and ended too ubruptly. So much potential though, I can't wait to read more! I love mystery, romance, passion, and sex of course! Thanks!
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