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by LeBroz01/24/06

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Needs a bit of editing to tighten it up ~ use of "you" is too overdone. As an easy example with the first strophe:

"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,
And you shelter me until I settle.
You are that nonmoving foundation on which I've begun to grow roots,
A steadfast presence in my life and my heart."

Could be tightened up a bit:

"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,
Then shelter me until I settle.
You are that foundation where I've begun to grow roots,
A steadfast presence in my life and heart."

Message tends to get lost with all the repeated appearances of "you."

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by Amyfriend01/30/07

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healing power of love..

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