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It's...
beginning to click in, isn't it.
Again, as with your free verse writing, it happens fast -- the little understandings begin to appear.
Do your own thing - 'haiku-wise' - is my suggestion. Read the right people.
winter
finally showed its strength this week. A good poem for the right weather. I like Haiku, saying so much with so little. Powerful poetry.
Very nice
A very nice haiku, WSO. The images are clear and free of editorial. I'm no expert on this form, but something you may want to think about: in haiku each word comes at a premium. In this poem you tell us the season 3 times (the title, the first word, and the snow). You might put the space of two of them to better use.
Good work.
Fly
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I really like haiku poetry, and I think this is what you're aiming for here. It didn't pull me in like I expected it to. I would love to see you expand a little. Maybe do the 5, 7, 5 counts. I believe it would work out better, and you could add more details by doing so.
Thanks for sharing, and keep writing! :)
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I'm hardly qualified to comment on a haiku. It's been ages since I wrote one, and I still need to learn more about them.
I like the poem. I wouldn't use "the" twice in a haiku. "the cat sleeps" doesn't have quite enough impact.
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I like it like it is, very nice.
Powerful imagery!
I really like the way this (short) poem provokes images. Those few short words brings back memories of winters past.
DJ
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A poetic quickie....
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