All Comments on 'A Do Too Far'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Laid not led please!

A little grammatical problem really distracted me, honestly. She laid on the bed, not she led on the bed. I think if the story was a little longer perhaps, it would have been more gratifying. I barely started it before he was finishing. Give more details. It ended up being a little hollow for me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Grammar

Re the comment "she laid on the bed" wrong and so many of the writers get this wrong. She is/was lying on the bed;

she will lie on the bed; I laid her on the bed; she lay on the bed; she has lain on the bed. Bad grammar is offputting but please get corrections right.

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
WAKE ME UP BEFORE YOU GO SOLO

and maybe we can both be happy. TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Great story! I love a good sleep sex story that doesn't involve rape and impregnation. Nice work!

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