by woodacre
A little grammatical problem really distracted me, honestly. She laid on the bed, not she led on the bed. I think if the story was a little longer perhaps, it would have been more gratifying. I barely started it before he was finishing. Give more details. It ended up being a little hollow for me.
Re the comment "she laid on the bed" wrong and so many of the writers get this wrong. She is/was lying on the bed;
she will lie on the bed; I laid her on the bed; she lay on the bed; she has lain on the bed. Bad grammar is offputting but please get corrections right.
Great story! I love a good sleep sex story that doesn't involve rape and impregnation. Nice work!