All Comments on 'How It All Began'

Julia, Nice first story. I might suggest that you give stories like this a better sense of closure - as it is, it ends abruptly. Some better copy-editting - it's "new" not "knew." And some more developed background on these characters. That's the constructive criticism. All in all though, very tender, very erotic, very good for a first story.

...wake us when you learn to write.

I loved the reality of it--the discovery of the pleasure two women can give each other. Please share more of your experiences with us!

it was lame, you could use some more description to make it hot but not that bad after all

Amy is a little sleeper isn't she! I love the fact that you both enjoy sucking cock, (and I wish I could give them a nice prodding properly). I liked the idea of them wanting more, after you had both come, "nice and slow" - this part was plenty hot as they were going into your bedroom. Very nice. I also like the picture of you loving kissing Amy at the end. Nice work sweet baby...

Please write about the girls 69ing.

Oh, and get a spelling and grammar check but it would still be gay as fuck!

Agreed -- story would benefit from additional editing, but loved, Loved, LOVED the part about how excited Amy is that her lesbian lover enjoys her vaginal scent and taste. This and sensitive touching / kissing are what make lez love life-altering.

That was Great!! Reading of two girls beginning to enjoy sex together and doing all that decision pleasure to each other of AWESOME ❤️

Nice start