All Comments on 'Christie's Summer Job'

I read this story and enjoyed it. Then I read your other story, "Play time(?). Enjoyed it, too!

Are these your first stories? If so, you're off to a great start. If not, I'd appreciate hearing where more of your work is published.

Keep writing!

Barnabus

barnabus329@hotmail.com

Hey there barnabus!

Yes these are my first stories that I have ever submitted, with more to come.

Could have been a great story... if you would have put any effort into it.

Not bad at all. I think the one thing you need to improve on is in details. The first time Christie has intercourse is discussed so briefly - barely 2 or 3 sentences. And I'm not even clear on what she looks like, much less what her employers look like. Why is Christie turned on by this guy?

Terrible, ghastly writing.

I enjoyed your story very much. Some of the previous comments were way off mark. Your grammar, spelling and usage were quite clean. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Keep on writing. John

This was a nice story with a slow, but predictable, result. The first sex act should have been related with much more detail. Nice style though. Keep trying.

gave me a stonker, which is how I judge stories, and I didn't notice any grammatical etc errors.

Teasing isn't worth much.