All Comments on 'The Queen of fucking Everything'

by LolaB

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SLC-OhioSLC-Ohioabout 18 years ago
Some parts really well done

The oils, the scents, the bath...Maybe, I thought, this is going somewhere. Then...Arimis after shave???

Lola the air went out of your sail with that line. But the story as a whole was well written, you can write, girl! I liked it, though there is room to expand on various parts of this tale. So many good metaphors, any one of the scenes could have been expanded into a story of its own.

Good luck.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
keep it pure

i am sure by the end of your evening your vaious body openings will be swimming with semen, i hope it all organic.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Aramis?

Try Paco Rabanne pour homme! :-)

I liked the female sexual power and confidence! Write more!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Nothing Like The PLeasure of it In Public!

Great story! Totally erotic and so full of feeling and erotic pleasures! Keep them cumin for us!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Awesome

Great story.. Please keep it up!!!

saw_man1saw_man1about 18 years ago
A Polaroid moment

That was a great recap of a very pleasurable and public moment.

Excellent build up and great writing made this a memorable read.

Thank you

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