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by Anonymous

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by LeBroz02/05/06

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Nice sentiments - a small suggestion - break it up a bit so the reader can savor the flavor, e.g.,

A lovers' eyes
could never tell lies
unless he looks
away.

A lovers' lips
upon fingertips
could leave you
with nothing to say.

Try it out - see what you think.

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by LeBroz02/05/06

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And, BTW,
Welcome to Lit!

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by Honey12302/28/06

So sweet

I truly do love this poem...but do take LeBroz' suggestions as to breaking up the verses...You will do well.

~Honey

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by GoddessOfSouls07/26/06

Beautiful

I like this such a deepness of spirit in your words

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by duddle14612/18/06

lovers

I will love you a lot Sunday, Monday or whenever.

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