Supposedly this story was typed into the Lit submission page while the author was in an intoxicated state. Well, that's your story so I guess you have to stick with it, but it sure as heck looks like a clever, well crafted, polished and sexy story. Actually, it IS clever and sexy, and looks like the other things. Thanks, Muse. Did I tell you that you are damn good? You are damn good. I will greedily consume whatever new offerings you purvey.
Five stories so far--and the only common denominator is talent and excellent writing. Geez, Muse, you're starting to make even a hard-core skeptic like me believe that Erato and her sisters might actually exist!
You've packed quite a punch in such a short story! It was as hot as cinnamon hearts and Atomic Fireballs combined! Honestly, that was the best blowjob scene that I've ever read.
That's the word that comes to mind while trying to describe this story. The writing seems to come to you through a haze, detached, but somehow it sneaks up on you and never lets you go even though you're done with the story. I didn't know words could do that.
Add my name in your list of enraptured fans please.
The pace and setup will simply leave you panting and wondering what just happened. Wonderful story. You bring the reader right there along for the ride. thanks
What's frightening is that it's clear you were mostly playing around when you wrote this; it's like seeing a swirling surface that gives evidence to a maelstrom below.
Very well done, Unsung Muse. This was a great story that left me a bit breathless by the end. The pace and the style of narration were perfect together ... and some of those lines should be deemed as instant classics.
a different way to look at valentine's day...
(and sorry if there are several comments, my computer is acting up, and it seems my comment doesn't get there, but not sure)
Another great story. You have a way of combining a poetic style with great storytelling. You paint very these erotic pictures with poetic language while still keeping them accessible. Thank you for sharing your very obvious talent with us.
if you just
pardon the
little liberty
with the
language you
shape in such
a facile way
very much like
a master(mistress?)
potter (potteress?)
moulds a
lump of clay
into a pot,
a bowl, a plate,
a vase, a lamp,
capturing a
little bit
of divinity
into each piece...
a lamp
by
Anonymous08/24/11
Great
Not only very hot, but a surprisingly high quality of writing. Worth a read in the realm of fiction or erotica.
English
Splendid
Simply the finest cinnamon heart story I've ever read. Wicked good fun!
Hail, Michelangela of drunken smut writers!
Supposedly this story was typed into the Lit submission page while the author was in an intoxicated state. Well, that's your story so I guess you have to stick with it, but it sure as heck looks like a clever, well crafted, polished and sexy story. Actually, it IS clever and sexy, and looks like the other things. Thanks, Muse. Did I tell you that you are damn good? You are damn good. I will greedily consume whatever new offerings you purvey.
Can I vote 110?
Five stories so far--and the only common denominator is talent and excellent writing. Geez, Muse, you're starting to make even a hard-core skeptic like me believe that Erato and her sisters might actually exist!
Muse, Good God...
You've packed quite a punch in such a short story! It was as hot as cinnamon hearts and Atomic Fireballs combined! Honestly, that was the best blowjob scene that I've ever read.
Good luck to you in the contest.
loved this!!
very vivid, sexy, and well written. Unique to Lit., I can't think of any other story quite like it!
Ethereal
That's the word that comes to mind while trying to describe this story. The writing seems to come to you through a haze, detached, but somehow it sneaks up on you and never lets you go even though you're done with the story. I didn't know words could do that.
Add my name in your list of enraptured fans please.
Breathtaking
The pace and setup will simply leave you panting and wondering what just happened. Wonderful story. You bring the reader right there along for the ride. thanks
Hugo
Wow
Wow...what a story! Incredible piece of writing. You are a very talented writer...my hat is off to you.
wow, I must be out of the loop
I'd never heard what cinnamon hearts are good for. Now I know...Great story and I never noticed anything hurried about it. Good luck in the contest.
Great story.. good luck
I think I need some hearts... great story.. good luck.
Still a bit breathless
just plain wow.......
Ok I want a friend like her!
Best I've read yet.
What's frightening is that it's clear you were mostly playing around when you wrote this; it's like seeing a swirling surface that gives evidence to a maelstrom below.
Great story!
I absolutely loved this story.
Perfectly erotic.
A torrid little tale
Very well done, Unsung Muse. This was a great story that left me a bit breathless by the end. The pace and the style of narration were perfect together ... and some of those lines should be deemed as instant classics.
Wow.
Just wow. What an amazingly hot story - thank you for sharing it with us. Good luck in the contest. :)
Mmmmmmm...
Awesome, Unsung Muse! Absolutely loved the writing. If you write like this about blowjobs, I can't wait to read your full on sex scenes. Really hot.
I'll definitely be checking out your other stuff!
Very imaginative
Good work, Muse. You packed a lot into a short, well-told tale. Good luck in the contest.
Rumple
An interesting
story, quite unusual. I tend to share the narrator's opinion of Valentine's Day as a holiday.
Very nice work, Muse.
Happy Valentine's Day & good luck in the contest. ~Imp
nice story...
a different way to look at valentine's day...
(and sorry if there are several comments, my computer is acting up, and it seems my comment doesn't get there, but not sure)
Hearts
can do funny things, right?
A short, hot story. I liked the way you conveyed the hazy state of mind. Well done.
Good luck.
Black Tulip
Wow!
This is the most original story in the contest, by far. Fantastic! Good luck :)
Poetic and Hot, a nice combination
Another great story. You have a way of combining a poetic style with great storytelling. You paint very these erotic pictures with poetic language while still keeping them accessible. Thank you for sharing your very obvious talent with us.
You are just three much
if you just
pardon the
little liberty
with the
language you
shape in such
a facile way
very much like
a master(mistress?)
potter (potteress?)
moulds a
lump of clay
into a pot,
a bowl, a plate,
a vase, a lamp,
capturing a
little bit
of divinity
into each piece...
a lamp
Great
Not only very hot, but a surprisingly high quality of writing. Worth a read in the realm of fiction or erotica.
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