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Japan Guide Ch. 01

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by Anonymous02/13/06

interesting start

Mr. Wesley,

What you have written is interesting, but it doesn't meet the subject matter standard. You would have been better off writing a couple of more chapters so that it would entice more people to read the rest of the story. I like the development of the lead charachter, but nothing has really happened yet.

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by Anonymous02/13/06

WHY BOTHER

WHY WRITE WHAT IS NOT FINISHED

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by jls15208/16/13

First Chapter

A nicely developed platform on to which to launch your story. Very nice.

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